The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by the level of education for the years 2002 and 2010.
Sample Response
The supplied two bar graphs depict the percentage of computer ownershipbelongings among the populationin a community. The first graph demonstrates the general computer ownership during an eight-year period fromsince 2002 to 2010. Meanwhile the second graph presents the datadetails the figure more specifically byregarding education level in both 2002 and 2010.
The overall trend created by the two sources illustrates an increasing number of people who owned computer due to the timeline and the level of education. Respectively, it can be seen that the latest the year, the higher the percentage of computer ownership and the higher the degree of education, the higher the ownership percentage.
Looking at the detailsdetail, the trend shownshowed in the first graph rose steadilygradually swelled from about 55% to roughly 75%from about 50% to around 70% out of 80% from 2002 to 2010respectively from 2002 to 2010 and represented an increase of about 20 percentage pointscounted for about 20% higher from the earliest to the latest time observed.
Meanwhile, across education levelsdue to the education level, the ownership percentage increased gradually between 2002 and 2010 at every qualification levelin each qualification level. As is shown by the graph, postgraduate qualification and bachelor’s degree accounted forwere roughly accounted for the highest computer-ownership percentagesthe high number of ownership's percentage. However, the trend range of computer belongings in no high school diploma essentially was the highest increase of ownership percentage range among all qualification level. It sharply jumped to more than double its initial levelmore than two times higher, from about 15% to just over 40%about 15% and more than 40% out of 100% in 2002 and 2010 respectively. On the other hand, the smallest percentage-point increase occurred atsmallest increase of percentage range was true for the postgraduate level that climbed up only from 80% in 2002 to about 95% in 2010.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response is strongest in providing a clear overview of the two main upward patterns and a generally logical progression from the overall trend to supporting details. Its main limitation is uneven accuracy and selection: it understates the overall rise and wrongly identifies the least-educated group as having the largest increase. Prioritize checking each value and comparison against the graphs, then express the findings with more natural academic collocations.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response gives a clear overview and some relevant figures, but several comparisons are inaccurate or insufficiently developed.
Verify the overall values and compare all education groups accurately, especially the largest absolute increase.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information follows a sensible introduction-overview-detail structure, although linking is sometimes mechanical and sentences become cumbersome.
Group the details into clearer comparisons and use simpler transitions instead of repeatedly relying on stock linking phrases.
Lexical Resource
There is some range in trend language, but frequent unnatural choices such as 'computer belongings' and 'ownership's percentage' reduce precision.
Use standard Task 1 collocations such as 'computer ownership,' 'proportion,' 'rose,' and 'percentage-point increase.'
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response attempts varied sentence forms, but recurring errors in articles, agreement, prepositions, and clause construction weaken control.
Prioritize accurate comparative structures and check subject-verb agreement and article use in every sentence.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by the level of education for the years 2002 and 2010.
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