The bar chart shows the number of times per week (in 1000s), over five weeks, those three computer packages were downloaded from the internet.
Sample Response
The given bar chart shows the number of downloads ofrepresents the information regarding downloading computer packages from the internet overwithin five weeks for each packageand data on how many times per week these packages are downloaded.
Overall, the number of Net downloadsdemand for the Net package was low every week compared with the other two packagescompared to others.
Looking at the detailsAt a fleeting glance, it is noticeable that in the first week, the number of ActiveX downloadscollection of active x was low, which was about 70,000below 80000, but as the weeksweek passed, ActiveX downloads generally increasedindividuals were more excited to download active X, which was in greatest demandhighly demandable by week 5when it went to week 5. In order to download a Java application, a little increase in difference can be seen every week for downloading this application.
Regarding the net computer package in the first two weeks, the demand was about 50000 which faced a decrease in the next two weeks with the amount of 30000 and 20000 respectively. In the fourth week the number of downloadsdownloading demand for the Net packageNet Application rose towent upward with 40000 downloads, and in the next week, the figurethis ratio rose furtherbegan to incline.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response is organised by package and correctly recognises that Net remained the least downloaded, while also noting the broad rise in Java and ActiveX. However, several Net figures are inaccurate or internally contradictory, and the overview omits the dominant position of ActiveX. The highest-priority improvement is to verify each weekly value against the chart and summarise the main ranking and overall trends before adding detail.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response identifies some broad trends, but its overview is incomplete and several reported Net values conflict with the chart and with one another.
State that ActiveX was highest throughout, then report the Net sequence accurately at roughly 35, 25, 15, 40, and 50 thousand.
Coherence and Cohesion
Paragraphing by general trend and package provides a visible structure, although vague referencing and contradictory week-four information weaken progression.
Describe each package in chronological order and avoid giving two different values for the same week.
Lexical Resource
There is some relevant trend vocabulary, but frequent unnatural combinations such as collection of ActiveX, highly demandable, and ratio reduce precision.
Use standard chart language such as downloads, rose, dipped, remained the lowest, and reached a peak.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Meaning is generally recoverable and some complex sentences are attempted, but article, agreement, clause, and tense errors occur repeatedly.
Use shorter controlled sentences with a clear subject and verb, especially when comparing values across consecutive weeks.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The bar chart shows the number of times per week (in 1000s), over five weeks, those three computer packages were downloaded from the internet.
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