The bar chart shows the number of times per week (in 1000s), over five weeks, those three computer packages were downloaded from the internet.
Sample Response
The chart illustrates the three different language programs installed on the computer by the users in five weeks from the Internet.
Overall, it is immediately apparent from the chart that the ActiveX softwareactive X software was the most downloaded program over the five weeksmost downloaded program in five weeks. However, in week five, this package was downloaded by usersthis package was consumed by the customers from the Internet more than others, while the Net packagenet language program was downloaded leastless prevalent in the third week.
In detail, in the first weekaccording to the first week, net packages downloaded from the Internet began nearly 32,000 times, and this figureratio fell by about 10,000plummeted by 4000 in the second week. Following this, in week 3, this amount fell by about 10,000 downloadsdeclined by around 2000 times downloaded from the internetworld wide web. Surprisingly, this value reached a barrier of over 4000 times in a week, inspired by 5000 times of net package transferred from the Internet by the customers.
Moreover, the trend of ActiveX showedactive expects significant changes in five weeks. This program was downloaded 40,000 times in the first week, and this value rose to about 95,000 downloadscrossed the line of 80,000 and touched 90,000 times availed that computer package from the Internet. In week fiveWhereas in week five, the software was used around 120,0001,20,000 times by the customers in their machines.
Furthermore, the detention of Java program packets was downloaded nearly 40,000 times from the Internet, which climbed to around 50,000 times in the second weekin a week second. After thisFollowing these, the Java package was downloaded approximately 70,000 timesapproximately 60,000 times the package of Java was bought from the Internet in the fourth week. Meanwhile, this value roseskyrocketed and peaked at 80,000 in the final week.
Why this response received Band 5.0
The clearest strength is the paragraph structure, which separates the three packages and includes an overview identifying ActiveX as the most downloaded and Net's low point in week three. The main weakness is that numerous values and trend descriptions are inaccurate or unclear, while unsuitable word choices often obscure comparisons. Recheck each bar systematically and report the five-week patterns with simple, precise language before adding stylistic variety.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response identifies two broad features, but several figures are inaccurate, some weeks are omitted, and parts of the Net and ActiveX trends are unclear.
Read each series across all five weeks and report its actual rise, fall, or fluctuation with accurate approximate values.
Coherence and Cohesion
Separate paragraphs for Net, ActiveX, and Java provide a recognizable structure, but progression within them is sometimes confusing and linking is mechanical.
Present each package chronologically from week one to week five and connect changes with straightforward time references.
Lexical Resource
There is some range in trend vocabulary, but frequent miscollocations such as 'consumed,' 'reached a barrier,' and 'detention' make descriptions unnatural or unclear.
Prefer precise chart terms such as 'downloaded,' 'rose to,' 'fell to,' 'remained highest,' and 'reached a peak.'
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response attempts complex sentences, but frequent errors in clause structure, agreement, word forms, and fragments sometimes impede understanding.
Use complete subject-verb sentences for each comparison and proofread complex clauses before combining them.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The bar chart shows the number of times per week (in 1000s), over five weeks, those three computer packages were downloaded from the internet.
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