The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
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Sample Response
The charts provide information on the changes in ownership of different household appliances, namely washing machines, refrigerators, and vacuum cleaners,namely washing machine, refrigerator and vacuum cleaner and the time expenditure on housework per week in a particular country between the years 1920 and 2019.
Overall, the percentage of households with electrical appliances rose significantly over the years, while the time expenditure experienced a major drop.
In terms of household appliances, washing machines were present in 40%washing machine took up 40% of the total households in 1920 and started to rise moderately, before reaching 70% in 1960. From the year 1960 to 1970 the proportion dropped slightly to approximately 65%, before rebounding to its peak, to roughly 74%. The proportion of the refrigerator rose steeply from about 2% in 1920 to 100% in 1980. In the following years the percentage remained at its peak. In addition, vacuum cleaner experienced an increase in percentage from 30% in 1920 to 100% in 2000. Between the years 2000 and 2019, the refrigerator and the vacuum cleaner shared the same ownership rate of 100%reported an equal share.
Regarding the time spent on household activities, the highest amount of time, precisely 50 hours per week, was reported in 1920, before dropping gradually to approximately 1518 hours per week in 1980. Between the years 1980 and 2000 the figure remained plateaued at around 15 hoursthe proportion remained at a moderate level before decreasing slightly to roughly 11 hours per week in 2019.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response effectively summarizes the visual data by presenting a clear overview and accurate numerical comparisons across both charts. The primary weakness lies in minor grammatical slips with article usage and slightly sequential reporting of data. To reach a higher score, focus on synthesizing comparative details across categories while polishing article placement.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
Key features and main trends are accurately identified and supported with precise data points from both line graphs.
Enhance key feature comparisons by directly contrasting the growth rates of different appliances rather than presenting each one in isolation.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information and ideas are logically arranged into clear paragraphs with effective transitional phrases throughout the response.
Vary sentence linkers beyond basic mechanical transitions to create smoother flow within paragraphs.
Lexical Resource
A good range of trend vocabulary is used accurately to describe percentages and time changes.
Incorporate a wider variety of precise collocations and comparative vocabulary to avoid minor word choice repetition.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A good variety of complex structures is displayed with high overall grammatical accuracy and control.
Ensure consistent article usage before singular countable nouns, such as appliance names.