The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
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Sample Response
The charts provide information on the changes in ownership of different household appliances, namely washing machinesmachine, refrigerators, and vacuum cleaners,refrigerator and vacuum cleaner and the time spentexpenditure on housework per week in a particular country between the years 1920 and 2019.
Overall, the percentage of households with electrical appliances rose significantly over the years, while the time expenditure experienced a major drop Deletein proportion.
In terms of household appliances, washing machines were owned by 40%washing machine took up 40% of the total households in 1920 and started to rise moderately, before reaching 70% in 1960. From the year 1960 to 1970 the proportion dropped slightly toat approximately 65%, before rebounding to its peakpeek, to roughly 74%. The proportion of the refrigeratorrefregirator rose steeply from about 2% in 1920 to 100% in 1980. In the following years the percentage remained at its peak. In addition, the vacuum cleaner experiencedvacuum cleaner experienced an increase in percentage from 30% in 1920 to 100% in 2000. Between the years 2000 and 2019, the refrigerator and the vacuum cleaner stood at the same percentage (100%)reported an equal share.
RegardingRegarading the time spent on household activities, the highest amount of timelargest proportion of expenditure, precisely 50 hours per week, was reported in 1920, before dropping gradually to approximately 15 hours per week in 1980at approximately 18% in 1980. Between the years 1980 and 2000 the proportion remained at a moderate level before decreasing slightlyslighly to roughly 11 hours per week in 2019roughly 11% in 2019.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The report effectively structures the visual data with a clear overview and logical paragraphing throughout. However, its main limitation is a accuracy error in the second chart where hours per week are mislabeled as percentages. The highest-priority improvement is to double-check the measurement units on axis labels to ensure all reported figures remain accurate.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
Key trends and main features are identified and described, but the unit for housework duration is incorrectly reported as percentages rather than hours in the final paragraph.
Pay close attention to vertical axis labels to avoid confusing percentage figures with absolute numbers or hours.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response presents a logical progression of ideas with clear paragraph divisions separating the two visual inputs.
Vary cohesive transition markers at the start of paragraphs to avoid repetitive introductory phrases.
Lexical Resource
A good range of topic-specific vocabulary and trend descriptions is demonstrated despite a few minor spelling slips.
Proofread carefully to fix small spelling errors such as 'peek', 'slighly', and 'refregirator'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Grammar and sentence structures are generally varied and accurate, allowing clear communication throughout.
Ensure consistent article use with singular countable nouns, such as including 'the' before individual appliance names.