The graph below shows the demand for electricity in England during typical days in winter and summer. The pie chart shows how electricity is used in an average English home.
Sample Response
The illustrations show the electricity demand in England onin a typical day in winter and summer and how electricity is used in an average English homealso how people use this electricity. According to the line graphthe first line graph, we can see that the electricity demand in winter is much higher than the demand in summer in England.
OnIn a typical day, the electricity demand in winterwinter season is around 35,000 units and it is around 18,000 units in summerthe summer season. Again the demand for the electricity varies on several hours of the day and the demand from 6:00 to 9:00 am is lesser than the demand in other hours of the day. During winter, demandDuring the winter the demand is highest from 21:00 to 23:00 and during summer, demandduring summer the demand is highest from 13:00 to 14:00 hours. The pie chart shows thatBased on the pie chart we can infer that heating rooms and water isthe room heating and water heating is the main use of electricitythe main purpose people consume the electricity in England. Washing machines, kettles, and ovens consumeThe demand for washing machine, kettle and ovens consume 17.5%around 18% of total electricity consumed and two other categories consume 15% of electricity each15% electricity each. These two other categories which together account for 30% of total electricitywhich consume 30% of total electricity include lighting, TV, and radiolight, TV, Radio, vacuum cleaners, food mixersvacuum cleaner, food mixer and other electric toolstold and devices.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response gives a clear central comparison between seasonal demand and covers the principal household-use categories, with sensible organisation from the line graph to the pie chart. However, its overview is incomplete and several figures and time trends are described only approximately, while frequent wording and agreement errors reduce precision. Add a fuller summary of both graphs and support it with exact peak, low-point, and percentage data.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The main seasonal contrast, peak periods, and household-use categories are covered, but the overview does not summarise both visuals fully and several details are approximate.
State the principal pattern in each visual and support it with exact values such as the peak demand and the 52.5% heating share.
Coherence and Cohesion
The report follows a sensible line-graph-to-pie-chart sequence, although the long second paragraph and vague references to two other categories reduce clarity.
Divide the details by visual and name each household-use category directly instead of relying on unclear backward references.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is sufficient for describing demand, variation, and proportions, but repetition and several inaccurate collocations limit flexibility and precision.
Use more exact phrases such as demand fluctuates over the day, accounts for, and household appliances, while checking spelling carefully.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures communicates the information clearly, though article, agreement, and sentence-pattern errors recur.
Focus on subject-verb agreement and complete comparative structures, especially when describing categories, proportions, and purposes.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graph below shows the demand for electricity in England during typical days in winter and summer. The pie chart shows how electricity is used in an average English home.
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