The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
Sample Response
The pie charts Deletebelow show the proportion of water consumption across three sectors (industrial, agricultural, and domestic) in six areas of the world.water usage in six regions. Overall, the majority of water is used for agricultureapplied in the agricultural around the world, except in North Americaaround the world except North America and Europe, where industrial use accounts for the largest proportion. Domestic use is low in percentage across all continents. In detail, Central Asia allocates 88% of itstheir water resources tointo agriculture and merely 5%the agricultural and merely 5% into industrial use. Africa, South East Asia, and South America follow a similar pattern that the predominant proportion of water is used in agricultureagricultural and only a small percentage in industry (between 7% and 12%).small percentage in industrial. By contrast, Europe and North America allocate 53% and 48% of their water consumption respectivelyspend 53% and 48% respectively of total water resources on industry.the industrial. The agricultural accounts for 39% and 32%. The percentage of domestic usage does not showsaw a significant disparity among these regions. The highest percentage is seensaw in South America where the number is 19% and the lowest in Central Asia and South East Asiacentral Asia and south east Asia where the numbers are the same at 7%.same at 7%
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response successfully presents a clear overview and accurate comparisons of key data across the six regions. However, grammatical accuracy is weakened by incorrect verb forms, and vocabulary relies on repetitive phrasing and incorrect part-of-speech usage. To improve, focus on mastering passive verb forms and using flexible, accurate word forms when describing categories.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The main trends and key figures are correctly identified and compared, with a clear overall overview provided.
Include specific percentages for all named regions to ensure body paragraphs fully cover the selected key features.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is logically grouped by regional trends, though transition phrases between ideas are occasionally mechanical.
Vary cohesive linking devices and ensure paragraphing transitions flow naturally between contrasting regional patterns.
Lexical Resource
Key data vocabulary is used appropriately, but adjectives are repeatedly misused as nouns when referring to categories.
Use correct noun phrases such as 'agricultural use' or 'the agricultural sector' instead of using adjectives alone.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Frequent errors in verb forms and passive structures reduce the overall accuracy of sentence structures.
Review past simple tense and passive constructions to eliminate incorrect forms like 'does not saw' or 'is saw'.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
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