The chart shows the number of mobile phones and landlines per 100 people in selected countries.
Sample Response
The given illustration gives data on the number of mobiles and land phone users in six different countries namely: Canada, US, Germany, Denmark, UK, Sweden and Italy.
As is presented in the chart Canada, US and Denmark have more landline users than the cell phone users while the opposite is true for Germany, UK, Sweden and Italy where the cell phone users exceed the number of land phone users. In Canada, the US and Denmark the numbers of cell phone users per 100 are consecutively 38, 48 and 71 while the landline users are 61, 38 and 87. On the other hand, the remaining 4 countries have much more mobile phone users than the landline users. The Italian people use the highest percentage of land phones and lowest percentage of cell phones on an average. On the contrary, Canadians use the lowest number of cell phones per 100 people while the mobiles phone users are almost half of the total land phone users. In summary, US and Canada have higher land phone users than the cell phone users while the European prefers to use cell phones than the land phones.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Add introductory comma Original: chart Canada Suggested revision: chart, Canada Why it matters: A comma is needed after the introductory reporting clause.
- 2. Compare chart figures Original: more landline users than the cell phone users Suggested revision: higher landline figures than mobile-phone figures Why it matters: The chart reports phones per 100 people rather than counts of individual users.
- 3. Use parallel measures Original: where the cell phone users exceed the number of land phone users Suggested revision: where mobile-phone figures exceeded landline figures Why it matters: Parallel figure terminology makes the comparison accurate and concise.
- 4. Spell out number Original: 4 Suggested revision: four Why it matters: Small numbers are conventionally written as words in formal prose.
- 5. Fix count comparison Original: much more mobile phone users Suggested revision: many more mobile-phone users Why it matters: Countable users requires many more, not much more.
- 6. Use accurate contrast Original: On the contrary Suggested revision: By comparison Why it matters: On the contrary contradicts a claim rather than introducing a different country comparison.
- 7. Report country data Original: Canadians use Suggested revision: Canada had Why it matters: The chart gives a past statistical figure for the country, not a general habit of Canadians.
- 8. Fix noun phrase Original: mobiles phone users Suggested revision: mobile-phone figure Why it matters: Mobiles cannot modify phone, and figure better matches the chart measure.
- 9. Correct proportion Original: almost half of the total land phone users Suggested revision: a little over half the landline figure Why it matters: Canada's mobile figure is about 38 versus roughly 63 landlines, which is over half.
- 10. Add article and tense Original: US and Canada have Suggested revision: The US and Canada had Why it matters: US requires the article and the report should consistently use past tense.
- 11. Use chart terminology Original: higher land phone users Suggested revision: higher landline figures Why it matters: The comparison concerns phone numbers per 100 people, not higher users.
- 12. Fix plural subject Original: the European prefers Suggested revision: most European countries preferred Why it matters: The subject refers to several countries and needs a plural noun and verb.
Suggested Rewrites
- chart Canada chart, Canada
- more landline users than the cell phone users higher landline figures than mobile-phone figures
- where the cell phone users exceed the number of land phone users where mobile-phone figures exceeded landline figures
- 4 four
- much more mobile phone users many more mobile-phone users
- On the contrary By comparison
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response identifies the main cross-country pattern for most countries and uses a comparative structure that is easy to follow. However, several central details are inaccurate, especially the number of countries, the US and Danish figures, and the description of Italy, which reverses the chart. The highest priority is to verify every country-value pairing and build the overview around the true extremes before refining grammar.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response offers a partly correct overview, but major numerical errors and the reversed description of Italy make the coverage unreliable.
Check all seven countries against the bars and report Italy as having the highest mobile figure and a comparatively low landline figure.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information follows a recognisable comparison pattern, although inaccurate contrasts and loosely used linkers create some internal contradiction.
Group countries consistently by whether mobiles or landlines are higher, then finish with a summary that preserves the Danish exception.
Lexical Resource
There is enough vocabulary for comparison, but repetition and awkward choices such as land phone users and consecutively reduce precision.
Use consistent terms such as mobile subscriptions and landlines per 100 people, with respectively for paired data.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Both simple and complex forms are attempted, but frequent agreement, article, plural, and comparative errors reduce control.
Proofread noun phrases and agreement, especially forms such as more mobile-phone users and Europeans prefer.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The chart shows the number of mobile phones and landlines per 100 people in selected countries.
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