The chart shows the number of mobile phones and landlines per 100 people in selected countries.
Sample Response
The given illustration gives data on the number of mobiles and land phone users in six different countries namely: Canada, US, Germany, Denmark, UK, Sweden and Italy.
As is presented in the chart, Canadachart Canada, US and Denmark have higher landline figures than mobile-phone figuresmore landline users than the cell phone users while the opposite is true for Germany, UK, Sweden and Italy where mobile-phone figures exceeded landline figureswhere the cell phone users exceed the number of land phone users. In Canada, the US and Denmark the numbers of cell phone users per 100 are consecutively 38, 48 and 71 while the landline users are 61, 38 and 87. On the other hand, the remaining four4 countries have many more mobile-phone usersmuch more mobile phone users than the landline users. The Italian people use the highest percentage of land phones and lowest percentage of cell phones on an average. By comparisonOn the contrary, Canada hadCanadians use the lowest number of cell phones per 100 people while the mobile-phone figuremobiles phone users are a little over half the landline figurealmost half of the total land phone users. In summary, The US and Canada hadUS and Canada have higher landline figureshigher land phone users than the cell phone users while most European countries preferredthe European prefers to use mobile phones rather than landlinesuse cell phones than the land phones.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response identifies the main cross-country pattern for most countries and uses a comparative structure that is easy to follow. However, several central details are inaccurate, especially the number of countries, the US and Danish figures, and the description of Italy, which reverses the chart. The highest priority is to verify every country-value pairing and build the overview around the true extremes before refining grammar.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response offers a partly correct overview, but major numerical errors and the reversed description of Italy make the coverage unreliable.
Check all seven countries against the bars and report Italy as having the highest mobile figure and a comparatively low landline figure.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information follows a recognisable comparison pattern, although inaccurate contrasts and loosely used linkers create some internal contradiction.
Group countries consistently by whether mobiles or landlines are higher, then finish with a summary that preserves the Danish exception.
Lexical Resource
There is enough vocabulary for comparison, but repetition and awkward choices such as land phone users and consecutively reduce precision.
Use consistent terms such as mobile subscriptions and landlines per 100 people, with respectively for paired data.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Both simple and complex forms are attempted, but frequent agreement, article, plural, and comparative errors reduce control.
Proofread noun phrases and agreement, especially forms such as more mobile-phone users and Europeans prefer.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The chart shows the number of mobile phones and landlines per 100 people in selected countries.
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