The graphs show figures relating to hours worked and stress levels amongst professionals in eight groups.
Sample Response
The graphs present data about working hours of different professionals and the percentage of employees experiencingexperience stress-related issues. Overall, businessmen work longer hours on an average and the stress-related illness among teachers are highest. As shownAs is presented in the bar graph, businessmen work 70 hours per week, the highest figure among the professions shownthe highest, among the average working hours of given professionals. Movie producers work 60 hours per week, the second-highest figurewhich is the second highest. The third longest working hours per weeks are for Doctors and they work more than 50 hours per week. Writers, programmers, lawyers and chefs work 45, 40, 35 and 3047, 40, 37 and 30 hours per week, respectivelyper week consecutively. The least working hours are for lecturers, 28 hours a week. Interestingly, though the lecturers work fewer hours per week than other professionals, their stress-related illness rate is higher than that of the other professionstheir stress-related sickness is higher than other experts. On an average, one quarter of lecturersone-fourth teachers have this problem. Movie producers and doctors have stress-related illness rates of 18% and 15%, respectively18 and 15 percentage anxiety issues consecutively. Though businessmen work longer hours a week, their percentage of stress-related ailment is 11%only 10%, lowerlesser than the lecturers, movie producers and doctors. Programmers, writerswriter and lawyers each account for less than 10% of the totalsuffer this issue less than 10% of the total.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response identifies the main extremes clearly and supports them with a useful range of figures from both charts. Its principal limitation is uneven accuracy: several working-hour values are slightly wrong, the businessmen figure is understated, and some stress categories are grouped vaguely. Prioritise checking every reported number against the visuals and organise the two datasets into distinct paragraphs while correcting recurring agreement and word-form errors.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A clear overview and most key comparisons are present, but several figures are slightly inaccurate and some stress categories lack precise coverage.
Verify figures against both charts and report the remaining stress shares, including chefs at 10% and businessmen at 11%.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information progresses logically from working hours to stress levels, although the single-block presentation weakens paragraph-level organisation.
Separate the overview, working-hours details, and stress figures into clear paragraphs and use comparison links selectively.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a reasonable range of topic vocabulary, but awkward collocations and repeated misuse of ‘consecutively’ reduce precision.
Use ‘respectively’ for paired figures and favour precise phrases such as ‘proportion affected by stress-related illness’.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex sentences communicates the data clearly, but agreement, plural, and article errors recur.
Edit systematically for subject–verb agreement and noun forms, especially ‘illness is’, ‘hours per week’, and ‘writers’.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graphs show figures relating to hours worked and stress levels amongst professionals in eight groups.
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