The charts below show the reasons for migration to and from one European country in 2009.
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Sample Response
The two pie charts compare the reasons for migration to and from one European country in 2009. Overall, a definite job was clearlyclearly was the most common reason for emigration from the country, while family / accompanying was the main factorfamily was the most common reason for immigration to the country. The category 'no reason' accounted forNo reason accounted for the smallest share in both charts. Regarding immigration to the country,In the first chart, 25% of the immigrants chose to migrate to a European country for family reasonsfor their family reasons. By contrast, among emigrants leaving the country,for the immigrants from a European country, only 15% left for family reasonsthe family reasons, 10 percentage points lower than the figure for immigrants. Furthermore, 15% of the immigrants moved to the country for other reasons,considered other reasons to a European country, compared with 23%which increased sharply to 23% for those who migrated from a European country. Turning to employment-related factors,A closer look at the second chart shows that 38% of the emigrants from the European country movedimmigrants from a European country migrated for a definite job, 15 percentage points higher than the corresponding figure for those who migrated to a European country. Moreover, the two charts showshowed that giving 'no reason' had the lowest percentageno reason was the lowest, with the figure for immigrants to a European country accounting for only 7%, while the figure for emigrants was only 4%while the other made up a share of 4%.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response effectively identifies key data points and trends, providing a clear overview of the main reasons for migration. However, the report occasionally confuses terminology such as immigrants versus emigrants and applies dynamic language to static pie chart comparisons. To improve, ensure precise labeling of demographic groups and use comparative rather than change-over-time phrasing for static data.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The report highlights major key features and includes a clear overall summary, but it uses dynamic language like 'increased sharply' for static snapshot data.
Use static comparative structures such as 'was higher' instead of trend verbs when describing single-year pie charts.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is arranged logically into clear paragraphs, though some cohesive linkers are slightly repetitive or misapplied.
Vary transitions between paragraphs and ensure reference words clearly distinguish between incoming and outgoing migrants.
Lexical Resource
A sufficient range of vocabulary is used to describe data, but word choice errors occur with prepositions and migrant labels.
Distinguish clearly between terms like 'immigrants' and 'emigrants' to avoid confusing the reader.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex sentence forms is present with generally good control, though grammatical errors in articles and prepositions persist.
Proofread for proper article usage, such as omitting unnecessary articles before general phrases like 'family reasons'.