The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year, 2016.
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Sample Response
The two pie charts illustrate the amounts of revenue and expenditure for a children's charity in the USA in 20162006.
Overall, donated food accounted for the largest proportion of revenue, while programprograme services represented the majority of expenditure. In addition, total revenueMeanwhile, total revenue was slightly higher than total expenditure.
Donated food made upThe donated food made up 86.6% of the total revenue, making it the dominant segment. Similarly, with regard to expenditure, program services spent nearly all of the outgoings for charity, at 95.8%. All other categories in both charts accounted for 10.4% or less. Community contributionscontribution, the second-largest revenue source, brought in 10.4% of overall income, followed by program revenueprograme revenun, at 2.2%. There was a small sourcesouce from investment income at 0.2%, government grantsincome at 0.2% and other income at 0.4%.
Turning to the remaining outgoings, fundraisingIn contrast, fundraising as well as managementmanagemnt and general were the only two other expenditure categoriesfields, with 2.6% and 1.6%, respectively. In general, the total amount of revenue was $53,561,58053,561,580, which was just enoughwhich just enough to cover the expenditure of $53,224,89653,224,896.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response provides a clear overview and accurate report of the main data features, effectively comparing revenue and expenditures. However, minor factual errors such as misstating the year and omitting currency symbols slightly detract from precision, alongside noticeable spelling slips. To improve, double-check key background facts against the prompt and maintain rigorous proofreading for spelling and grammatical completeness.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The essay presents a clear overview and covers key categories accurately, though it misstates the year from the prompt and omits dollar signs from monetary values.
Ensure all prompt details such as dates and measurement units are accurately copied and explicitly labeled.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is logically organized into dedicated paragraphs for revenue and expenditure with clear linking words.
Vary transitions further to connect comparisons more smoothly between the two charts.
Lexical Resource
A sufficient range of task-appropriate vocabulary is used, though spelling errors like 'programe' and 'managemnt' occur repeatedly.
Proofread carefully to eliminate frequent spelling mistakes in key terms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mixture of simple and complex sentence structures is used with generally clear control, though minor grammatical omissions occur.
Ensure relative clauses contain full verbs to maintain grammatical accuracy throughout complex sentences.