You live in a room in the college hostel which has severe problems. You would like to move into another room and need your hostel super’s permission for that. Write a letter to the hostel super. In your letter: - introduce yourself - describe the problems - explain what type of room you would prefer
Sample Response
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing to you to request a change toin request to change my current roomcurrent hostel accommodation. I am facing certain issues in the room where I currently liveroom I am residing in and would like to shift to a different room.
My name is Shreya Basu, and I am a second-year business management student atin your college. My current room number is D-14, and I have lived in this hostelhave been residing in this hostel since my first yearsince my first year at this college. The first problem is thatTo begin with, the room was already quite crampedcongested when I moved in with my belongingsessentials, but sinceever since I was assignedallotted a roommate, the available living space has become extremely limitedliving space has become negligible. Also, because there is only one windowdue to the presence of only one window, the room lacks proper ventilation, making the room feel stuffy at timeswhich feels suffocating at times.
I kindly request you to consider my appeal and allow me a new room that is fit to reside in with all my necessary belongings and has a reasonable amount of space and ventilation.
Yours faithfully,Yours Faithfully,
Shreya Basu
Why this response received Band 7.0
The letter has a clear formal purpose, covers all three prompts, and supports the request with relevant details about overcrowding and poor ventilation. Its main limitation is that the preferred replacement room and the severity of the problems are only briefly developed; specifying practical requirements and consequences would make the request more persuasive, while a final edit should also remove a few awkward expressions.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The purpose is clear, all three bullet points are addressed, and the formal tone suits a request to the hostel supervisor.
Develop the preferred-room requirements and explain the practical effects of the current problems more fully.
Coherence and Cohesion
The letter progresses logically from the request and introduction to the problems and desired solution, with clear paragraphing.
Use a more explicit transition into the final request so the proposed solution follows even more smoothly from the problems.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is varied and topic-specific, including effective choices such as congested, ventilation, and suffocating.
Replace awkward collocations such as in request to and fit to reside in with more natural formal phrasing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of simple and complex sentences is handled accurately, and errors do not impede meaning.
Check relative-clause references and phrasing so descriptions such as which feels suffocating attach clearly to the intended idea.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You live in a room in the college hostel which has severe problems. You would like to move into another room and need your hostel super’s permission for that. Write a letter to the hostel super. In your letter:
- introduce yourself
- describe the problems
- explain what type of room you would prefer
Your response
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