You have just spent a weekend staying at the Lilo Hotel in Adelaide. When you got home, you find that you have left a bag at the hotel. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter: - introduce yourself - describe the bag and its content - describe how you left your bag and what action you would expect from him/her

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Sample Response

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Dear Sir or Madam,

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I stayed at theyour Lilo Hotel in Adelaide from 2nd to 5th April 2025 in room 254. I am writing to ask for your assistanceI am writing for your assistance in finding the bag that I leftthe bag that I have left in the room during my stay at your hotel. First, I was pleasedFirstly, I am gratified to receivehave outstanding service at your hotel. I really enjoyed it and I would definitely like to come again. I would now like to describe the bag.Now, I would like you to help me locate my bag. It is a black bag with blue stripesIt is a black bag and has blue stripes on both ends and two zipperswith two zippers attached to it. The bag that I left at your hotel contains some important documents and personal belongingssome of my personal belongings including contact cards, a few items of clothinga few dresses, pens and a diary. DeleteYou are already aware of the fact that I visited Adelaide to attend a professional meeting. To keep pace with my colleagues, I hurried to check out and left the bag in the closet. Please check with your lost and found department about the bag and inform me at your earliest convenienceinform me at your earliest so that I can come to pick my bag. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Fahad Sultan

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.0

The letter’s strongest feature is its clear coverage of the stay, the bag and its contents, how it was left, and the requested lost-property check. Its effectiveness is reduced by dense paragraphing and several unnatural phrases and grammar choices. The highest-priority improvement is to organise the details into distinct paragraphs and finish with precise contact and collection arrangements.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TA

Task Achievement

7.5
Scoring rule

The letter introduces the stay, describes the bag and contents, explains how it was left, and asks the manager to check lost and found. The purpose is clear and the expected action is relevant.

Next step

Add a phone number or email address and a preferred collection method to make the requested action more complete.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

7.0
Scoring rule

The response is logically sequenced from stay details to bag description, contents, reason it was left, and request. Cohesion is weakened by one unnecessary compliment section and some dense one-paragraph formatting after the greeting.

Next step

Keep the compliment brief and use separate paragraphs for stay details, bag description, and requested action.

LR

Lexical Resource

6.5
Scoring rule

Vocabulary is suitable overall, but some phrases are unnatural, such as "gratified to have outstanding service" and "inform me at your earliest". The bag description is clear enough.

Next step

Use standard service and lost-property phrases such as "I was pleased with the service" and "at your earliest convenience".

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.5
Scoring rule

Most grammar is clear, but article use, tense, and preposition choices are inconsistent. Errors do not prevent understanding, but they reduce polish.

Next step

Check present perfect use for the lost bag and prepositions in phrases such as "assistance with" and "pick up".

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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1

You have just spent a weekend staying at the Lilo Hotel in Adelaide. When you got home, you find that you have left a bag at the hotel. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter:

- introduce yourself

- describe the bag and its content

- describe how you left your bag and what action you would expect from him/her

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