Some people think that environmental problems are too big for individuals to solve, while others think that the government cannot solve these environmental problems unless individuals make some action. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Sample Response
The environment has become a major concern over the last couple of decades, resulting in several debates on who should be responsible for ensuring its sustenance for our future generations. In this essay, we will discuss the points of viewpoint of views to establish wherefor establishing where the responsibility for the protection of the environment lies. There is a strong argument that we cannot individually make a meaningful contributionindividually we cannot contribute materially to the cause of preserving our environment because it encompasses several areas where individual efforts become futile. Some examples are factories emittingfactories that are emitting hazardous gases into the airin our air or dumping dangerous materials intoin our rivers. If we want to take this up as an individual we cannot be expected to be able to prevent this from happening. One could argue that if each shareholder puts pressure on the companies that they own this could lead to building up of pressure for being more responsible, this, unfortunately, is not workable because usually the companies are mostly owned by funds that are managed by professionals, seeking profit and environment is very low on their priority list. The above leads us to concludededuct that if the effort to preservethis movement of preserving our environment is a collaborative effort by the government and the general publicgovernment and general public we stand a better chance of being successful. The government should provide the legal infrastructure to control the profit-seeking instincts of investment institutionsthe natural instinct of profiteering of all investment institutions; with this, the individual efforts could start making athe difference. Continuing the example, ifContinuing the above example if an individual member of societymember of the society notices the same thing happeningnotices that same happening in his or her surroundings, he or she can call on an enforcementimplementation agency that could take action against the factorywould tackle the factory emitting hazardous gases and dumping dangerous materials. Examples of these implementation agencies include Environment control desk in the city office, environmental inspectors who randomly visit such factories and are empowered under the law to impose a fine or completely seal the production facility found in violation of the rules. The responsibility surely seems to be tilting towards the actions of individuals supported by government agencies and a legislative frameworksupported through government agencies and legislative framework, thus, in my opinion, the combined efforts of the government and public would be more effective. This should not, however, be interpreted as being absolved from keeping our environment clean and we can through cans and other non-degradable materials on the beach.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response offers a thoughtful, relevant argument that connects individual action with government regulation, using industrial pollution as a sustained and convincing example. Its main limitation is uneven control: the two views are not sharply separated, the single-block structure strains progression, and several awkward or inaccurate expressions culminate in a confusing final sentence. Use distinct paragraphs for each view and proofread the conclusion for exact meaning.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both perspectives are addressed through a relevant industrial-pollution example, and the opinion favouring combined action is clear and developed.
Differentiate the second view more explicitly and end with an unambiguous statement of what individuals must do alongside government action.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument progresses logically through one extended example and uses cohesive references effectively, but the lack of paragraphing and some long sentences reduce clarity.
Separate the first view, the collaborative alternative, and the opinion into distinct paragraphs, each with a clear topic sentence.
Lexical Resource
A broad range of environmental, legal, and economic vocabulary conveys complex ideas, although some word choices and collocations are imprecise.
Replace awkward choices such as deduct and implementation agency with precise natural alternatives, and check easily confused words such as through and throw.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex sentence forms are used with reasonable control, but punctuation, articles, clause boundaries, and the final sentence contain noticeable errors.
Break overloaded sentences into controlled units and proofread each clause for articles, agreement, and the intended positive or negative meaning.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people think that environmental problems are too big for individuals to solve, while others think that the government cannot solve these environmental problems unless individuals make some action. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
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