Some people think that environmental problems are too big for individuals to solve, while others think that the government cannot solve these environmental problems unless individuals make some action. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Sample Response
Pollution becomes a major concern in society all over the world. In society, not only an individual but also groups of people live. In society, it is everyone’s responsibility to protect the environment. Environmental problems caused by pollution, for example, fuel gases, cutting of trees, gases released by factories. The government should take responsibility to reduce pollution in order to protect the environment. Every individual who is leaving in society should take responsibility to participate in protecting the environment. Firstly, people should grow trees in their houses, premises and colonies. By growing trees there are huge advantages, for example, most of the polluted gases took over by trees and they release the oxygen. Everyone should not throw the wastages on the roads, maintain a healthy environment by using the dustbins. At the same time if we consider the government’s role: the government have authority to protect the environment. By planting the trees all over the places, for example, all government places, besides the roads, schools, and parks etc., what I know this type of programme called a clean and green environment. Thus the pollution can be controlled. Cleanliness is very important to maintain a healthy environment, hence government should emphasise the cleaners to clean the area thoroughly. Should place the dustbin every street and educate the individuals by advertisements. Inspect the houses every month to check how the individuals maintain their houses so that the individuals reflect themselves and self-correct themselves. Conduct environmental talks in the school, that individual learns everything from childhood onwards in the school. I believed that it is every individual’s responsibility to solve the environmental problems, however, impossible for only one individual in the society. So that government should take actions to solve the environmental problems but encourage every individual to takes part in all those activities.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use present perfect Original: becomes a major concern Suggested revision: has become a major concern Why it matters: The present perfect describes a concern that developed and remains current.
- 2. Correct the verb Original: who is leaving in society Suggested revision: who lives in society Why it matters: Lives expresses residence, whereas leaving has a different meaning.
- 3. Use a realistic phrase Original: grow trees in their houses Suggested revision: plant trees around their homes Why it matters: Trees are planted around homes rather than grown inside houses.
- 4. Use clearer place nouns Original: premises and colonies Suggested revision: properties and neighbourhoods Why it matters: These nouns communicate the intended residential locations more naturally.
- 5. Avoid ambiguous negation Original: Everyone should not throw Suggested revision: No one should throw Why it matters: No one should clearly states that the prohibition applies to everybody.
- 6. Use uncountable noun Original: the wastages Suggested revision: waste Why it matters: Waste is the appropriate uncountable noun for discarded material.
- 7. Join the verbs Original: on the roads, maintain Suggested revision: on roads and should maintain Why it matters: The conjunction and repeated modal correctly coordinate the two actions.
- 8. Remove unnecessary article Original: the dustbins Suggested revision: dustbins Why it matters: The general plural noun does not require the definite article here.
- 9. Fix agreement and article Original: government have authority Suggested revision: government has the authority Why it matters: The singular collective noun takes has, and authority needs the article in this expression.
- 10. Remove unnecessary article Original: By planting the trees Suggested revision: By planting trees Why it matters: Trees is used generally here, so the definite article is unnecessary.
- 11. Correct the expression Original: all over the places Suggested revision: in many places Why it matters: In many places is the natural expression for multiple locations.
- 12. Use precise location noun Original: all government places Suggested revision: government-owned sites Why it matters: Government-owned sites names the intended locations more precisely.
Suggested Rewrites
- becomes a major concern has become a major concern
- who is leaving in society who lives in society
- grow trees in their houses plant trees around their homes
- premises and colonies properties and neighbourhoods
- Everyone should not throw No one should throw
- the wastages waste
Why this response received Band 5.0
The response maintains a relevant central view that both governments and individuals must act, and it supplies several practical examples. However, the two requested views are only partially distinguished, ideas are repetitive, and the single-block structure combines with frequent sentence-level errors to weaken clarity. The highest priority is to organise the argument into clear paragraphs that separately explain each view, then support each with accurately formed sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response addresses both individual and government action and gives an opinion, but the opposing views are only partly explained and development is repetitive.
Explain why individuals alone may be insufficient and why government action still depends on collective participation before stating a reasoned opinion.
Coherence and Cohesion
The main message is traceable, but the lack of paragraphing and weak sequencing make the progression mechanical and occasionally confusing.
Use separate introduction, body, and conclusion paragraphs, with one clearly ordered central idea in each body paragraph.
Lexical Resource
The response has enough environmental vocabulary to convey its main points, but frequent inaccurate word choices and repetition limit precision.
Build control of natural collocations such as "industrial emissions," "household waste," and "raise public awareness."
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Some sentence variety is attempted, but frequent fragments, agreement errors, and article or verb-form mistakes weaken accuracy.
Prioritise complete subject-verb sentences and check articles, agreement, and verb forms before attempting longer structures.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people think that environmental problems are too big for individuals to solve, while others think that the government cannot solve these environmental problems unless individuals make some action. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
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