Some people think that environmental problems are too big for individuals to solve, while others think that the government cannot solve these environmental problems unless individuals make some action. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Sample Response
Environmental problems have dramatically increased over the last few years. A rapid increase in population and other problems such as pollution, deforestation, global warmingglobal warming etc. have further exacerbated the situation. Some people argue that these problems are too large to be addressed by an individualan individual being. I believe that it is a shared responsibility of individuals and governmentsmutual responsibility of both individuals and countries to take pragmatic measures to solve themfor its solution. Overpopulation is one of the pivotal factors harmingpivotal reasons that have detrimental effects on the environment. An increase in population demandsIncrease in population demand more food resources, living space and other basic amenities of life. For instance, to create housing,for the sake of accommodation many natural parks and forests have been wiped out to fulfil the need for living space. This has ledlead to severe consequences that could harm both people and the environmentdamage both the people and the environment. Individual efforts can contribute greatly to addressingcontribute a lot to address the pressing environmental problems. Steps taken at an individual level can be an effective solution for the world. For instance, if the government of a country takes initiatives to reduce the rubbish produced daily, can’t do much. However, if the citizens make an effort at the individual leveltake effort from their personal level, rubbish production could be greatly reducedcontrolled tremendously. Similarly, if the administration of a country starts planting trees, the initiative would not succeedthe effort would not go further without the cooperation of individualscollaboration of the individuals. Pollution is also a serious threata great menace to the environment. It is not only the causereason of environmental problems but also has a dire effect on people. Factories operating within cities emit dangerous smoke and other harmful toxins, which seriously affect people's healthare enormously affecting people health and making them more susceptible to diseases. Furthermore, pollution also contributes to global warming. There has been a drastic increase in temperature around the globe, which in turn, melts glaciers across the world. These are no longer national issues and all the governments of the world should work together to address this pressing problem. That is why prudent decisions are required atfrom the government level and the ordinary citizens should be encouraged toand participate in every way possible to make the world a better place to live in. To sum up, I would like to say that environmental problems should be addressed on a large scale. Everyone has to contribute in order to mitigate their harmful effectsmitigate its vulnerable effects on the world. Even a little effort by an individual can make a huge difference.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response presents a clear collaborative position and uses a wide range of topic vocabulary to explain why citizens and governments must act together. Its main limitation is uneven task coverage: the view that problems are beyond individuals receives little direct development, while the absence of paragraphing weakens progression and several grammar and collocation errors reduce precision. Prioritise a balanced two-view structure with distinct paragraphs and carefully checked sentence patterns.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The writer gives a clear opinion and relevant reasons for joint action, but the opposing view is only briefly acknowledged and several environmental causes distract from the debate.
Develop a distinct argument explaining why individuals may be unable to solve large-scale problems before evaluating it against the case for collective action.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument follows a broadly understandable sequence, but presenting the entire response as one paragraph obscures the stages of the discussion.
Divide the essay into an introduction, separate body paragraphs for each view, and a conclusion, with each paragraph centred on one controlling idea.
Lexical Resource
A fairly wide range of environmental vocabulary conveys the main ideas, although recurring collocation and word-form problems reduce precision.
Use more natural combinations such as 'individual action,' 'make an effort,' and 'harmful effects,' and avoid intensifiers that do not fit the noun or verb.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response attempts varied complex structures, but agreement, article, possessive, and clause-construction errors recur across the essay.
Proofread each complex sentence for a complete main clause and correct subject-verb agreement before adding subordinate details.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people think that environmental problems are too big for individuals to solve, while others think that the government cannot solve these environmental problems unless individuals make some action. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
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