Developing countries require help offered by international organizations to ensure healthy and sustainable development. Some people think that financial aid is important. Others believe that practical aid and advice is more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In contemporary society, a growing number of people are more concerned about the international forms of international aidsupporting issues that international institutions supply developing countries in healthy and sustainable development. Some individuals argue that financial supports are important while others maintain practical assistanceassistances and suggestions are more necessary for underdeveloped countries. From my perspective, I agree with the latter view.

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Advocates of the latter perspective argue thatFrom the latter view, individuals insist practical actions and advice can help underdeveloped countries handlehandle with their real problems directly and effectively. Rather than financial supports, these countries are facingfacing with more complicated issues and need experts’ advice which is totally relevant to their actual situations. For example, some countries in the Middle Eastmiddle East areas and Africa are enduring the lack of water; theylack of water, they want professional methods to deal with this ecological problem instead of simply gaining money. In addition, these underdeveloped countriescountry do not have enough people with higher education and professional knowledge. Just financial aid cannot provide them withhelp them be able to have these human resources immediately. In fact, the practical aid and advice then provides them professional conceptsconceptions and developing strategies, which are what they really want.

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By contrast, we need to admit that financial aid is crucial for developing countries. There is a saying that economic basis determines the superstructuredetermines to the upward structures. Financial supports can help developing countries be able to buy new technology and improve their infrastructureinfrastructures, and they can spend it on whatever they want according to their actual requirements. Giving practical aid and advice maymay can resolve their temporary problems rather than cultivate their own developing capacities. However, it is also strong evidencea strong evidence that it can be necessary for developing countries to resolve ecological problems as soon as possible, which cannot be solved by their own abilities even with enough financial supports. International organisations provide new technology and experts to these developing countries and address the issue with real situations, which can be the most efficient way for these countries to overcome difficultieswalk out of difficulties and begin to develop more rapidly.faster and faster.

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In conclusion, although this issue remains a matter of debate, I believe thatif the position that practical aid and advice from international organisations stands out as the more balanced and practical one.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.0

The essay effectively addresses both sides of the prompt and presents a clear opinion supported by relevant examples. However, the organization of body paragraphs could be more distinct, and grammatical inaccuracies alongside incomplete sentences obscure clarity in places. To achieve a higher result, ensure body paragraphs focus on one perspective at a time and carefully proofread to eliminate structural errors.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TR

Task Response

6.0
Scoring rule

Both viewpoints are addressed with relevant explanations and examples, and a personal position is stated.

Next step

Ensure the conclusion sentence is fully completed so that the final position is restated clearly.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

6.0
Scoring rule

Information is organized into paragraphs with clear overall progression, though ideas within the second body paragraph shift back and forth.

Next step

Keep body paragraphs dedicated strictly to one viewpoint before transitioning to the opposing perspective or counter-argument.

LR

Lexical Resource

6.0
Scoring rule

A good range of topic-specific vocabulary is used, though there are several awkward word choices and preposition errors.

Next step

Focus on accurate prepositional collocations such as writing 'handle' or 'face' instead of adding 'with'.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.0
Scoring rule

A mix of complex structures is attempted, but frequent minor grammatical errors and double modals occur throughout the text.

Next step

Eliminate double modal verbs like 'may can' and check subject-verb agreement across complex sentences.