Some people think that human needs for farmland, housing, and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals. Do you agree or disagree with this point of view? Why or why not?
Sample Response
As human population is significantly increasing every year, people's requirements are increasing too. We need more food, more machines, more place to live and so on. As a result, people need more land areas to satisfy their requirements. We cultivate and irrigate more and more lands to plant vegetables, build new buildings, airports, roads, etc. I think sometimes we forget that we are not alone on this planet. I have to disagree with those people who think that human needs are more important than saving land for endangered animals. I base my opinion on the following points.
First of all, as I have already mentioned, we are not alone on this planet. A few centuries ago we were the part of wild nature. I think we need to remember this fact and respect all creatures around us. The green planet has thousands of species and all of them have equal share to live here freely. If we use all the lands for us, it will be impossible for other species to survive. As humans, we have a responsibility to let other species live in a natural environment.
Second of all, I believe that we all need to think of the problem of overpopulation. The human population is dramatically increasing and we have to do something about it. From my opinion, every family should have no more than two children. It will help to stop the growth of population, decrease human needs for farmland, housing and industry.
In conclusion, I think it is a very topical question nowadays that whether we, humans, have the supreme possession of everything on earth. My point is that all people should answer this question and find the solution. But as far as I am concerned, other species have as much right as we have to be here.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Add definite article Original: As human population Suggested revision: As the human population Why it matters: The singular phrase referring to the world's population requires "the".
- 2. Use natural collocation Original: is significantly increasing Suggested revision: is growing significantly Why it matters: Populations naturally "grow" rather than "increase" in this construction.
- 3. Prefer needs Original: people's requirements are increasing Suggested revision: people's needs are growing Why it matters: "Needs" is more natural than "requirements" when referring to food, housing, and land.
- 4. Use space Original: place Suggested revision: space Why it matters: "Space" is the natural uncountable noun for the amount of room people need.
- 5. Remove redundancy Original: more land areas Suggested revision: more land Why it matters: "Land areas" is redundant because "land" already expresses the required meaning.
- 6. Use uncountable land Original: lands Suggested revision: land Why it matters: "Land" is uncountable when referring generally to territory used by people.
- 7. Use grow Original: plant Suggested revision: grow Why it matters: People normally "grow" vegetables; "plant" refers more narrowly to placing seeds or plants.
- 8. State view directly Original: have to disagree Suggested revision: disagree Why it matters: The modal phrase adds unnecessary reluctance to an otherwise direct opinion.
- 9. Remove article Original: the part of wild nature Suggested revision: part of nature Why it matters: The fixed expression is "part of nature," without an article before "part" or "nature".
- 10. Use precise reference Original: The green planet Suggested revision: Our planet Why it matters: "Our planet" refers to Earth more directly and avoids an imprecise descriptive label.
- 11. Fix article and noun Original: equal share to live here freely Suggested revision: an equal right to live here freely Why it matters: The singular countable noun needs an article, and "right" fits the claim better than "share".
- 12. Use uncountable land Original: lands Suggested revision: land Why it matters: "Land" is uncountable when it means territory in general.
Suggested Rewrites
- As human population As the human population
- is significantly increasing is growing significantly
- people's requirements are increasing people's needs are growing
- place space
- more land areas more land
- lands land
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response takes a consistent position that endangered species' land should be protected and supports it with an ethical argument about shared rights and a practical link to population pressure. Its main limitation is that the second point shifts toward family-size policy without fully explaining the land-conservation mechanism; the highest-priority improvement is to develop each reason with concrete consequences for habitats and endangered animals.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The position is clear and supported by two relevant reasons, although the overpopulation argument is only partly connected to endangered-animal habitats.
Show explicitly how reduced population growth would limit land conversion and protect a particular species or ecosystem.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay progresses logically through an introduction, two reasons, and a conclusion, though some repetition and basic sequencing are noticeable.
Use the opening sentence of each body paragraph to advance a distinct argument instead of restating earlier ideas.
Lexical Resource
There is sufficient vocabulary for population, development, species, and conservation, but several word choices and collocations lack precision.
Use natural expressions such as land, part of nature, an equal right to exist, and shared stewardship of the planet.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses a mix of sentence structures with generally clear meaning, despite recurring article, plural, preposition, and clause errors.
Proofread noun phrases for articles and countability, then check the structure of complex questions and concluding clauses.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people think that human needs for farmland, housing, and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals. Do you agree or disagree with this point of view? Why or why not?
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