Some people think that human needs for farmland, housing, and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals. Do you agree or disagree with this point of view? Why or why not?
Sample Response
Ever increasing human demandsdemands of mankind have strained the natural resources available to usexisting resources our mother nature has. To meet these growing demandsFor this elevated demands for farmland, housing and industry,& industry using the land traditionally reserved for forests is an easy, practical, and inexpensiveeasy, logical and cheap option for many. However, in my opinion, encroachingin my opinion encroaching forest landthe jungles will be costlymore expensive and can have devastating consequencescan be fatal if not stopped. We will see the ecological and economicecological & economical impacts it is having on humanity in this essay.
Why this response received Band 5.0
The response establishes a relevant position and signals two possible lines of argument, while some topic-specific vocabulary communicates the intended stance. However, at only 71 words it remains an introduction rather than a developed essay, providing no reasons, evidence, or conclusion; the priority is to build two fully explained body paragraphs with specific support and then close by restating the position.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A position is stated, but the response is far below the required length and does not develop or support any reason for it.
Write complete body paragraphs explaining the ecological and economic arguments with specific consequences or examples, followed by a conclusion.
Coherence and Cohesion
The four sentences follow a basic context-to-position sequence, but the response is too brief to demonstrate sustained progression or paragraph organisation.
Organise the promised ecological and economic points into separate body paragraphs with clear topic sentences and logical development.
Lexical Resource
Some relevant topic vocabulary is attempted, but collocations such as ‘elevated demands’ and ‘economical impacts’ are inaccurate.
Use standard academic combinations such as ‘growing demand’, ‘economic impact’, and ‘land set aside for wildlife’.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Sentence structures show some variety, but agreement, article, punctuation, and clause-control errors occur frequently in this very short sample.
Correct agreement and sentence boundaries, especially in the sentence beginning ‘For this elevated demands’, and proofread articles and commas.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people think that human needs for farmland, housing, and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals. Do you agree or disagree with this point of view? Why or why not?
Your response
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