Multinational companies are becoming increasingly common in developing countries. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?
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The number of multinational companiesThe multinational type of companies is increasing in the developingdeveloped nations. While the advantages of such a phenomenonsuch phenomenon are economic because these companieseconomical as these companies create a large number of jobscreate large number of jobs and invest significant capitalcapitals for their operations, the effects on the environment and the over exploitation of natural resources are the disadvantages. The advantages of these companies are economiceconomical, and one benefit is the creation of jobsone of the benefits is creating job vacancies. Owing to the nature of these companies and their high standardsstandard, their operations are carried out under certain standards that require a significant number of employeesrequire significant number of employees. As a result, they tend to employ many people from local communities. In addition, these firmsthose Firms usually invest substantialhuge capital in order to establish their local presence and facilities such as headquarters and accommodation for their staff. For example, IBM, a computer manufacturer, invested heavilyhugely in China as part of their plan to establish their manufacturing plants there. On the other hand, one of the disadvantages of these companies isare their harmfulbad effects on the environment. For those multinational firms, in most cases, making a profit takes precedence overmaking profit precedence over any other consideration including the environmentincluding the nature and the environment. Their activities usually produce enormous amountsamount of toxic chemicals and gases that cause global warming. In addition, in order to meet their large production capacity, they consume the natural resources in an unsustainable wayin a sustainable way, causing irreversible damage to naturecause irreversible damage to the nature. For instance, multinationalmutlinational mining companies seeking marble in the mountains of Italy have devastatedhave severely devastated the area and these highlands. To conclude, the benefits of multinational companies are economical as they create job vacancies and invest significant liquidity, whereas the effects on the environment and the exhaustion of natural resources are the disadvantages resulting from such companies.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response is strongest in its clear coverage of economic benefits and environmental disadvantages, with each side supported by explanation and an example. Its main limitation is reduced precision: the opening changes developing countries to developed nations, while recurring grammar and word-choice errors sometimes weaken the argument, including the contradictory use of sustainable. The highest-priority improvement is to preserve the task's context exactly and proofread key claims for accurate meaning.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both advantages and disadvantages are addressed and supported, but the opening misstates the task's developing-country context.
Keep the response anchored to developing countries and qualify broad claims about environmental harm.
Coherence and Cohesion
The ideas follow a clear advantages-to-disadvantages sequence, though the response is presented as one continuous paragraph.
Use separate paragraphs for the introduction, each main side, and the conclusion to strengthen progression.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is sufficiently varied for the topic, but recurring collocation and word-form errors reduce precision.
Use accurate combinations such as economic benefits, capital investment, and unsustainable resource consumption.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses both simple and complex forms, but errors in articles, agreement, and clause construction recur.
Edit each sentence for subject-verb agreement, countable-noun forms, and complete verb structures.