Multinational companies are becoming increasingly common in developing countries. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?
Sample Response
Global companies are becoming more common in developing countriesgaining more popularity among third-world countries. The main advantages of this are that they create more jobsgenerate more employment in a country and provide valuablegood benefits to employees. However, the major drawbacks are long working hours and job insecurityunsecured jobs. One benefit of multinational companies is that they employ a large workforce. This is because these big companies have several branchesmore than two or three branches around the country, thereby increasingcountry, thereby, increasing the employment rate within the country. Moreover, these companies offer valuable benefits to their staffhave good benefits for their staff, compared with those at local companiesas compared to local companies, such as an annual travel allowanceyearly travel compensation and comprehensive family insurance coveragefull coverage family insurance. For instance, Amazon provides an annual international tripa yearly international trip to eachthe employee and their family, covering accommodation and return tickets. On the other hand, having to work extremely long hours is the major disadvantage of working for such companiesbeing in such companies. This is because these companies handle clients who work in different time zoneszone. Hence, the employees have to work in their local time zone as well as according to their clients' time zonesas well as per client time zone, which can be several hours apart. Furthermore, losing a job at any time is the biggest fear of employees working for such organizations, unlike in the government sectorunlike government sector, where an employee cannot be dismissedfired from the job easily. For example, atin Apple Inc., it has been reported several timesit is reported several times that the employees are fired because of conflicts with their bossesdue to their grudges with their boss. In conclusion, multinational organizations have benefitted developing countries by increasing the employment rate and making the lives of employees better by providing good benefits. However, it does not have strict policies for their staff as they have to work long hours and fear of losing their job at any time.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response gives a balanced, relevant discussion with two advantages and two disadvantages, each supported by explanation or an example. Its main weakness is presentation as a single paragraph, which obscures the otherwise logical argument, while recurring grammatical and collocational inaccuracies reduce polish. Prioritise dividing the essay into clear functional paragraphs and editing sentence structures, agreement, and word choice for greater precision.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both sides are directly addressed through distinct, relevant ideas that receive generally sufficient explanation and illustration.
Make the examples more credible and explicitly connect each one to its claimed effect on developing countries.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument follows a clear sequence, but presenting the entire response as one paragraph substantially weakens its structural clarity.
Separate the introduction, advantages, disadvantages, and conclusion into purposeful paragraphs with one central function each.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is adequate for the topic and conveys the main distinctions, though repetition and several unnatural collocations limit precision.
Use more exact terms for job security, employee benefits, and working arrangements while reducing repetition of companies and employees.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses both simple and complex sentences, but recurring article, agreement, plural, and reference errors remain noticeable.
Edit systematically for determiner use, singular-plural agreement, and clear pronoun reference, especially when referring to companies and staff.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Multinational companies are becoming increasingly common in developing countries. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?
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