Do you support that the nuclear technology should be used for constructive purposes?
Sample Response
Like any other technological invention, the nuclear power has a great potential to be used positively for the betterment of the people and at the same time, it can cause disaster if used negatively. So the use of nuclear technology and its possible destructive power is an issue which is much debated and in my opinion, we should use this power positively for the benefit of the human. First of all, the technology contains power and this power can both be positively and harmfully used. Nothing is wrong with the technology or tool but with the people who actually command it. We can’t think of the modern life without the use of cell phone, TV, refrigerator etc. and are not they causing harm to the environment? Yes they are, and a single gas cylinder can be used to cook foods and then feed people or run vehicles and on the contrary can be used to blow up a house. Only because the gas has the power to blow a house does not abstain us from using it for our benefits. Second, most of the countries in the world, except few rich countries, struggle for the electricity and similar energy powers and can’t improve because of the scarcity of it. The nuclear power can be a great source of energy for these countries and can be a very effective solution for them to improve their life standard and overall economic status. In every sphere of life, we need energy: from irrigation to hospital operation and the use of nuclear energy can ensure better lives for us. Obviously, the nuclear power possesses a great power that can destroy a city or even a country if not properly handles, but this is not the reason we should completely forget about a power that can change the world. In conclusion, we should learn from our past mistakes about the explosions of the nuclear centres and then come with better solutions to use this power towards the betterment of mass people.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Remove unnecessary article Original: the nuclear power has Suggested revision: nuclear power has Why it matters: The uncountable noun phrase uses no definite article when referring to nuclear power generally.
- 2. Remove article before potential Original: a great potential Suggested revision: great potential Why it matters: Potential is uncountable in this general sense and does not take the article a.
- 3. Use collective noun Original: the human Suggested revision: humanity Why it matters: Humanity correctly refers to people collectively in this context.
- 4. Clarify the claim Original: the technology contains power Suggested revision: nuclear technology is powerful Why it matters: Contains power is an unnatural way to describe the capability of a technology.
- 5. Place both correctly Original: can both be positively and harmfully used Suggested revision: can be used both positively and harmfully Why it matters: Both should directly introduce the two parallel adverbs it coordinates.
- 6. Remove unnecessary article Original: the modern life Suggested revision: modern life Why it matters: Modern life is a general uncountable expression and does not take the definite article here.
- 7. Use plural examples Original: cell phone, TV, refrigerator etc. Suggested revision: cell phones, TVs, refrigerators, etc. Why it matters: Generic countable examples should be plural, and etc. should be separated from the list by a comma.
- 8. Use uncountable food Original: foods Suggested revision: food Why it matters: Food is normally uncountable when referring to nourishment in general.
- 9. Show direct contrast Original: and on the contrary Suggested revision: but, conversely, Why it matters: But clearly coordinates the beneficial and destructive uses being contrasted.
- 10. Complete phrasal verb Original: blow a house Suggested revision: blow up a house Why it matters: Blow up is the required phrasal verb for destroying a building with an explosion.
- 11. Use correct verb Original: abstain Suggested revision: prevent Why it matters: Prevent someone from doing something expresses the intended meaning, whereas abstain is intransitive here.
- 12. Use singular benefit Original: benefits Suggested revision: benefit Why it matters: The fixed expression for our benefit uses the singular uncountable form.
Suggested Rewrites
- the nuclear power has nuclear power has
- a great potential great potential
- the human humanity
- the technology contains power nuclear technology is powerful
- can both be positively and harmfully used can be used both positively and harmfully
- the modern life modern life
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response presents a clear, consistent position and supports it with relevant discussion of energy needs and the principle that technology itself is neutral. Its main limitation is that several points, especially the gas-cylinder analogy, are overextended and only loosely develop the specific case for nuclear technology. Prioritise sharper nuclear-specific evidence and organise the two main arguments into distinct paragraphs.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear position is maintained and supported with relevant reasons, though some development remains general or indirect.
Replace the extended gas-cylinder analogy with a specific, well-explained example of constructive nuclear use.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument progresses clearly through signposted ideas, but the lack of effective paragraphing weakens its organisation.
Separate the introduction, each main argument, and the conclusion into distinct, logically focused paragraphs.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is sufficiently varied to discuss the topic, although repeated words and inaccurate collocations reduce precision.
Use more precise nuclear-energy vocabulary and correct combinations such as living standards and benefit humanity.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures conveys the message, but recurring article, agreement, and clause errors are noticeable.
Proofread complex sentences for articles, subject-verb agreement, and accurate verb forms before finalising the response.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Do you support that the nuclear technology should be used for constructive purposes?
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