Some people think parents should read or tell stories to children, while others think parents need not do that, as children can read books, watch TV or movies by themselves. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Sample Response
While some people think that parents should read or tell stories to children, others think that parents need not do thatneed no to do that, as children can read books or watch TV or movies by themselves. These experiences give the children a good relationship with their parents, also is very important for the communication between parents and children.
In my opinion, parents should read or tell stories to children, because this simple activitythis little thing creates fond childhood memoriesgives good memories of their childhood and allows them to share valuable timeshare a good and an important time with their parents. For example, I remember my dad used to tell me stories every night before going to sleep, no matter how long or short these stories wereno matter how long or short were these stories, I always enjoyed his stories and I had a really good time with him. These days, parents work all daywork the whole day and the children spend time atin school and doing homeworkand to finish homework, so the only time they see each other is at breakfast and dinnerduring the breakfast time and dinner time, therefore they do not have much time to spend together or talkmuch time to share or talk. So in terms of establishing a strong bond between children and their parentsbetween the children and parents, it is necessary to share stories in personshare the stories in person.
Children can read books or watchsit in front of the TV watching movies or cartoonssome cartoons by themselves. Some people think that communication between parents and childrenthe communication between parents and kids in the future will declinewill be lost, because ofas a consequence of that trend and because of the lack of parents’ time with the children.
My conclusion is, parents should read or tell stories to children and spend time with them. Little things can make lastingbig memories and stronggood relationships.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response has a clear opinion and supports the value of parental storytelling with a relevant personal example and discussion of family bonding. Its main limitation is that the opposing view is barely explained and even shifts back towards the writer’s preferred position, so the required discussion is uneven. The priority is to develop why some people consider independent reading and viewing sufficient, then compare that rationale with parental involvement.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The writer’s position is clear and the case for parental storytelling is developed, but the alternative view receives only minimal and partly contradictory treatment.
Explain concrete reasons supporters of independent reading or viewing hold that view before evaluating why direct parental storytelling is preferable.
Coherence and Cohesion
Paragraphing and overall progression are clear, but several long run-on sentences and repetitive linking make the flow uneven.
Give each view its own focused paragraph and break the personal example and time-pressure argument into shorter, logically connected sentences.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is adequate for familiar ideas about family relationships, but it is repetitive and includes awkward phrases such as “gives good memories” and “share the stories.”
Use more precise expressions such as creates lasting memories, strengthens parent-child bonds, and engage with stories independently.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Meaning is generally accessible, but errors in verb forms, agreement, word order, and sentence boundaries occur frequently.
Correct forms such as “need not,” maintain subject-verb agreement, and avoid joining several independent clauses with commas.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people think parents should read or tell stories to children, while others think parents need not do that, as children can read books, watch TV or movies by themselves. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
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