Disruptive school students have a negative influence on others. Students who are noisy and disobedient should be grouped together and taught separately. Do you agree or disagree with this view?
Sample Response
A society is a mixture of people with positive and negative traitsvirtuous and evil minds, so is a school where you could find children of both natures. Now the question arises whether disruptive studentsthe mischievous students should be separated and taught apart from othersparted and educated from others? Is this going to benefit the other students in the class? In my opinion, this is not going to help, because such a clear divisionsuch a distinctive line does not exist outside the school environmentoutside the realm of school.
Because school is a unit of societyConsidering school as a unit of society, where one's conscience is solely responsible for choosing the right or wrong path, students should be familiar with the sources of negative influencesources of shoddy influences from their school life. Through exposure to such negative influences, students develop the judgementthe student gets equipped with the sense to prioritise his social contacts and interactions. Overcoming such hurdles in schooling will help them deal with the pressures of societythe sheer pressure of the society in the futurein future, where similar negative influences are commonsources of carnage are plenty. These students should be well supported and guided by the teachers to avoid being influencedavoid themselves getting influenced by their disruptive peersthe black sheep of the herd. MoreoverOn the contrary, grouping all the disobedient and noisy students together would be like making matters worsemaking the matter from bad to worse. For example, a bad habit from one student of the group is going to influence the rest of them, if one student smokes, probably the rest are going to follow him. Moreover, as said earlier, no one is born a criminalborn as a criminal, rightly so, the causative factor behind their disruptive behaviour in these students should be identified and rectified by school staffthe school force. They should be given a chance to be positively influenced by the good behaviourget influenced by the goodness of their counterparts. I would like to conclude the discourse by stating that separation is never a solution for a unified society that we all dream of. Whether students behave well or badly, they allWhether a good or bad student - all should be schooled together.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response presents a clear disagreement and supports it with several relevant reasons, particularly the risks of concentrating disruptive pupils together. Its main limitation is that the argument is compressed into one very long body paragraph and is sometimes expressed through exaggerated or imprecise language. The highest priority is to separate and develop the main reasons in focused paragraphs, using more natural, exact wording.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear position is maintained and supported by relevant reasons and an example, although some claims are overstated or insufficiently examined.
Develop each principal reason more precisely by explaining how mixed schooling would help both disruptive and well-behaved students.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument progresses logically overall, but nearly all development is placed in one dense body paragraph with some overloaded sentences.
Divide the discussion into focused body paragraphs and use clearer sentence boundaries to make each stage of the reasoning easy to follow.
Lexical Resource
The response demonstrates a broad vocabulary, but several forceful expressions and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural in context.
Prefer precise, conventional phrases such as negative influences, social pressure, and school staff over dramatic or awkward alternatives.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of complex structures is used and meaning remains clear, though punctuation, agreement, and clause-control errors recur.
Review long sentences for comma splices, pronoun agreement, and unnecessary reflexive forms, then split them where needed.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Disruptive school students have a negative influence on others. Students who are noisy and disobedient should be grouped together and taught separately. Do you agree or disagree with this view?
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