In some countries today, there is an attitude that ‘anyone can do it’ in the arts – music, literature, acting, art, etc. As a result, people with no talent become rich and famous and genuine talent is not valued or appreciated. Do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
How do people become an artist? This question is a really fashionable trend in many parts of the world. Talentless people become an artist because of luck, a good opportunity, and networking. These reasons are commonly used by artists who are popular with this trend. I tend to disagree with this issue because becoming an artist is not about luck. I will outline the reasons and examples to support my arguments.
The job of an artist is an honourable job. S/he is public figures whom people always stare on their performance both in their real life and on their stages. Therefore, they need to give their best in their life to entertain people. They have to make a great preparation and hard work before becoming an artist, so their performance will not disappoint their fans. For example, singers should train their voice, learn about tunes and songs before their voice are enjoyed by many people. A singer who gets that "singer" title without ability will gain the bad judge even s/he produce a good song by the citizen.
In addition, artists who inexpert in their field are usually cannot survive for a long time, because they cannot perform a good performance. Take YouTube artists as examples, they only famous for several months and disappear because they lack the capability.
It is true that everyone has their own luck and deserves to pursue the chance, but it cannot be denied that for a particular job such as artist need special ability and capability.
To sum up, I must say that people have to prepare themselves well before they act as public figures to survive in that industry. In my opinion, as a nature talent, being an artist is really a special career, therefore I disagree that people get that job only because of luck and no attempt to get that position.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use plural noun Original: people become an artist? Suggested revision: people become artists? Why it matters: The plural subject requires the plural count noun here.
- 2. Choose accurate wording Original: a really fashionable trend Suggested revision: a widely discussed issue Why it matters: A question cannot itself be a fashionable trend.
- 3. Match plural forms Original: Talentless people become an artist Suggested revision: Talentless people become artists Why it matters: The plural subject needs the plural complement 'artists'.
- 4. Use correct collocation Original: issue Suggested revision: view Why it matters: Writers disagree with a view or claim rather than an issue.
- 5. Remove repetition Original: an honourable job Suggested revision: honourable Why it matters: This removes the repeated noun 'job' without changing the claim.
- 6. Use concise phrase Original: their best in their life Suggested revision: their best Why it matters: The added phrase 'in their life' is redundant and unnatural here.
- 7. Use verb forms Original: make a great preparation and hard work Suggested revision: prepare thoroughly and work hard Why it matters: The original coordination incorrectly treats 'hard work' as something people make.
- 8. Match plural reference Original: voice Suggested revision: voices Why it matters: The plural noun 'singers' requires a plural possessive reference.
- 9. Fix agreement Original: voice Suggested revision: voices Why it matters: The plural verb 'are' requires the plural subject 'voices'.
- 10. Add linking verb Original: artists who inexpert Suggested revision: artists who are inexpert Why it matters: The adjective 'inexpert' requires the linking verb 'are'.
- 11. Remove extra verb Original: are usually cannot survive Suggested revision: usually cannot survive Why it matters: The modal 'cannot' must not be preceded by 'are'.
- 12. Avoid repetition Original: perform Suggested revision: give Why it matters: The verb-noun combination 'perform a performance' is redundant and unnatural.
Suggested Rewrites
- people become an artist? people become artists?
- a really fashionable trend a widely discussed issue
- Talentless people become an artist Talentless people become artists
- issue view
- an honourable job honourable
- their best in their life their best
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response maintains a clear disagreement and offers relevant reasons about preparation, skill, and career longevity in the arts. Its main limitation is that these ideas are only partly developed and sometimes reduce the prompt's broader claim to a question of luck, while frequent grammatical and collocational errors weaken clarity. The highest priority is to develop each reason with precise explanation and consistently accurate sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear position is maintained, but the prompt is addressed somewhat narrowly and supporting ideas remain limited.
Explain more directly how untalented fame affects genuine artists and develop each reason with a specific, relevant example.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response has a recognisable progression from position to reasons and conclusion, although paragraph development and linking are uneven.
Use each body paragraph for one fully developed reason and connect supporting sentences through clear logical relationships.
Lexical Resource
There is sufficient vocabulary to discuss artistic careers, but inaccurate word choice and collocations are frequent.
Replace awkward combinations such as descriptions of judgment, ability, and natural talent with precise, conventional collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Some complex structures are attempted, but frequent errors in agreement, articles, sentence formation, and verb forms reduce accuracy.
Prioritise complete clause structures and check subject-verb agreement and article use throughout every sentence.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
In some countries today, there is an attitude that ‘anyone can do it’ in the arts – music, literature, acting, art, etc. As a result, people with no talent become rich and famous and genuine talent is not valued or appreciated. Do you agree or disagree?
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