Two-Part Question Essay

You have decided to give several hours of your time each month to improve the community where you live. What is one thing you will do to improve your community? Why? Use specific reasons and details to explain your choice.

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    A community brings people from a diverse culture and economic background together. In my community, many predicaments persist such as illiteracy, health problems, and environmental issues.

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  2. Band 6.5
    Task Response
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    Coherence and Cohesion
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    Lexical Resource
    Band 6.5
    Grammatical Range and Accuracy
    Band 6.5

    Historically humans have dwelled in a community which sets them apart from the other species on earth. Communities have existed in different forms and can be the epicentre for any grown civilisation.

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