Opinion Essay

Television injects violence in children, and programs with violent scenes should be banned. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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    The general level of aggressive behaviour seems to be elevated in youngsters from the current generation. The intensity of negative traits such as violence is becoming more commonplace among children and this tendency is a matter of concern for many parents.

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    According to social studies, violence among children is escalating day by day, which keeps the entire nation on alert, especially their parents. Some people cite the best solution to this thorny issue is to eliminate all violence-related programs on television while others perceive it as a drastic answer.

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