Bài Writing chính thức trong Cambridge IELTS 18–21

Đối chiếu toàn bộ 64 bài Writing chính thức hiện có trong Cambridge IELTS 18–21 cho cả Academic và General Training: 50 bài thí sinh có điểm cùng 14 bài mẫu do giám khảo viết, luôn đi kèm đề bài và nhận xét đầy đủ.

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Cambridge IELTS 21 · General Training Test 2

General Training · Task 1

Band7.5
Số từ
194
Dạng bài
Thư

Đề bài đầy đủ

You enjoy walking in the countryside near your home. However, you are noticing that there is more and more litter left there by other walkers. Write a letter to your local newspaper. In your letter • say why you enjoy walking and where • describe the litter you have seen on your walks • suggest what might be done about the problem Dear Sir or Madam,

Bài viết đầy đủ của thí sinh

Dear Sir or Madam I have been enjoying long walks in the near countryside for years. Admiring the thriving nature is a great pleasure. I love observing wild animals roaming around and take pictures of them. It is my passion and it gives me much happiness. The countryside is a place where I can forget about the problems of my everyday life. I am sure that it brings everyone joy. However recently I have started noticing large piles of rubbish being left around the place. I have found enormous amounts of plastic bags, bottles, containers and even tires. Not only does it destroy the beauty of the countryside’s landscape, but it also destroys the delicate environment of the place. The litter can be dangerous to animals. I have found things such as gasoline containers. The problem has to be dealt with immidiately. I would support having people pay fines for leving the rubbish in such places. The town council could also set up cameras, to catch such people. Another way of dealing with the problem could also be sending police patrols to control the situation. I hope my proposition will be considered Sincerely, XYZ

Nhận xét đầy đủ của giám khảo

The writer has covered the three bullet points in detail: the passion for walking, the types of litter [plastic bags, bottles, containers | tires | gasoline containers], and the suggestions for solutions [pay fines | cameras | police patrols]. The response is easy to read, with good cohesion. The writer has used a range of cohesive devices [however | Not only | but | also] and used referencing [them | such people] to achieve this. There is flexibility in the use of vocabulary, with some good collocation and higher-level items [thriving nature | delicate environment | dealt with | control the situation], and only a few errors [immidiately / immediately | leving / leaving]. Similarly, there are a variety of grammatical structures, including modal forms and some multi-clause sentences. However, many of the sentences are fairly short, single clause sentences and, in the second paragraph, there is repeated use of the present perfect. This is already a strong response to the task. To achieve the highest ratings, there could be greater accuracy in use of vocabulary, and wider use of multi-clause sentences.
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Cambridge IELTS 21 · General Training Test 2

General Training · Task 2

Band5.0
Số từ
183
Dạng bài
Bài luận Task 2

Đề bài đầy đủ

Some people believe that international sports events, such as The Olympics or the Football World Cup, are a good way to bring countries together. Others say that these events create competition, not friendship, between countries. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Bài viết đầy đủ của thí sinh

In this globalised eon, without any qualms that the Olympics or the football World cup, are a good way to bring countries together. Some people coincide that others say that these events created competition, not friendship, between countries. Howbeit, I debunk from them to proffer that, I believe that international sports events, are a good way to bring countries together. All the teams are playing very well and all the countries teams, and team members are well-mannered. Compelling the obtainable avidances to demonstrate that some peopls thinking are worng becaus it’s just game’s and if all the member playing personality, concrete the reason is if any team or team member showed bad behave and they represent thier country. To go hand in hand which drag me to persist is the team member should behave good whenever they loss the match. To the snopsiye, I put the pen it’s a just entertainment show for others how they teams play. In the last, In my opinion people shouldn’t more serious about games. When you loss the game you should apperiate and congratulate the winning team.

Nhận xét đầy đủ của giám khảo

The response addresses the part of the question about ‘bringing countries together’ but does not cover the aspects of ‘creating competition between countries’ and is, therefore incompletely addressed. The position is stated at the end of the first paragraph [I believe that international sports events, are a good way to bring countries together] but the development is not clear. There is a focus on the behaviour of the players rather than how this impacts on the countries. To improve this response, there should be more focus on whether sporting events ‘bring countries together’ or harm relationships between them. Information is organised into three paragraphs and some cohesive devices are used [which | whenever] but overall, there is a lack of progression. Vocabulary is minimally adequate with some correct resource [well-mannered | Compelling | demonstrate] but spelling can be inaccurate [avidances | snopsiye] and the range is not very wide. There is a limited ability to use grammatical structures and errors are frequent. To achieve a higher score, the candidate should present more ideas around the second part of the question and ensure the conclusion relates fully to the question. They should also demonstrate a greater level of accuracy with vocabulary and grammatical structures.
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Cambridge IELTS 21 · General Training Test 3

General Training · Task 1

Band6.5
Số từ
192
Dạng bài
Thư

Đề bài đầy đủ

This summer your local council organised a series of free concerts in your local park. You attended one of the concerts. The council has asked for feedback about the concerts. Write a letter to the council giving your feedback. In your letter • say which concert you attended • explain why you enjoyed the concert • make suggestions for improving next summer's concerts Dear Sir or Madam,

Bài viết đầy đủ của thí sinh

Dear Sir Kowalski, I am writing in connection with a series of free concerts that took place this summer in our local park. You asked me to attend one of the concerts and wanted me to give you feedback about it. I have to say that there were many interesting concerts and I had a huge problem choosing one of them. I wanted to go to each concert but I chose only one I had time to go there. The name of the music group was Kensington – just like the Palace in the United Kingdom. There were four young men. Two of them played the guitar, one played the piano and the last sang. They played very loud but their music was nice to listen and dance. I have see many dancing people during their performance. My suggestions for the next summer’s concerts are to keep the direction. Everybody who listened to those concerts was happy. I asked a few questions and a woman above me said that she loved it and want such a kind of events every year. I enclose a short movie I have recorded. Yours sincerely Renata

Nhận xét đầy đủ của giám khảo

This letter is a strong response and it covers each area of the task, describing the concert attended [Kensington], saying why it was enjoyable [nice music] and including an overall suggestion to keep the summer concerts going. These points should be extended further for a higher score, for example, including clearer ideas on how to improve the concerts, rather than [keep the direction]. Organisation of ideas is generally logical and there is a clear progression. Linking devices are used well, with a range of referencing [one of them | the last | their], although there is some inaccurate use [to go there | such a kind of]. There is appropriate vocabulary [in connection with | huge problem choosing] with a few errors [above] that don’t detract from the meaning. There are some effective grammatical structures, including multi-clause sentences and a range of tenses. However, the range of structures overall is limited, and there are errors [I have see / I have seen | want / wants]. Overall, sentences are short and the level of error in grammar does have an impact on the score. To achieve a higher score, the bullet points should be more fully explored, and a greater range of vocabulary and grammatical structures should be included.
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Cambridge IELTS 21 · General Training Test 3

General Training · Task 2

Band5.0
Số từ
190
Dạng bài
Bài luận Task 2

Đề bài đầy đủ

Nowadays many large international companies offer their staff the opportunity to spend a period of time living and working in another country. Why might this opportunity be good for employees? What advantages does this development have for companies?

Bài viết đầy đủ của thí sinh

Nowadays many large international companies offer their staff the opportunity to spend a period of time living and working in another country In my opinion this is good opinion to develop companies and make it grown up, also it can be prove their staff more skills and have more knowledge by this way. Everyone known the world that we live in is a faster like the higher speeding weel, change every day. The companies need to move ahead and stateges need to shift. their leader, managers, technologers, and more staff need to study more. It will be have a high level after a period of time studing. I think more advantage for companies and for staff spend a period of time living and working in another country. There are more multiple couture in another countries. transport and economice bring us big way to easy to living and working in another country. Just keep going progress with learning more from another country, you can gain richfull knowledge and skills. Eventually you can find the would will rewards you. and the international companies which you work to will be bigger and stronger!

Nhận xét đầy đủ của giám khảo

The first paragraph, and the end of the third paragraph are copied from the question. The writer does agree that this kind of opportunity to live and work in another country is a positive one, but beyond this, the development is not clear. The main ideas are limited and we do not really hear why it is good for employees, and good for the company in any detail. Organisation is not very logical but there is a sense of underlying coherence. Simple vocabulary is used accurately, but overall, there are frequent errors [weel / wheel | technologers | couture | richfull | would / world] that are noticeable for the reader. There are some complex structures used but, overall, sentence control is very weak and this makes some parts, such as the conclusion, very hard to follow. Note: wording that is copied from the question is not assessed by the examiner. Test takers should try not to simply copy the question within their response.
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Cambridge IELTS 21 · General Training Test 4

General Training · Task 1

Band5.5
Số từ
175
Dạng bài
Thư

Đề bài đầy đủ

All new employees at your workplace have a mentor – an experienced colleague who gives them advice and support in their career. As a new employee, you have been given details of your mentor. Write a letter to introduce yourself to your new mentor. In your letter • give a brief outline of your previous studies and work experience • explain what help you hope your mentor can give • suggest arrangements for a first meeting with your mentor Dear ....................,

Bài viết đầy đủ của thí sinh

Dear Sir, I appreciated your time in help me, by beeing my coach. I though write a letter will help you to meet me better and optimize our process. I have being working in marketing area for over ten years. I started in a Junior position and my last role I was working as marketing coordinator, leader of a group of fine persons. Althoug I have a vast experience in field, I continue to study, now I am a student at Adelaide University, doing a Master Degree in Marketing. I was wondering if you could help me understand how representative is the e-commerce in this company and introduce me to the time. I send to you an invitation for our first meeting. I had checked your agenda before. But, please, feel free to suggest another day. And let me know if you any addicional information. I want to thank you in advance for making time for coach me through this process. Start a role in a new company can be very chalenging. Regards, Bianca Goncalves

Nhận xét đầy đủ của giám khảo

In this response, all the bullet points are covered and the purpose of the letter is generally clear. The introduction to the new mentor includes information about previous areas of work, and current studies, an indication of the area of help [e-commerce], and an invitation for the first meeting. Overall, more clarity and more detail across bullet points 2 and 3 would improve the TA rating. For example, in bullet point 3 [send to you an invitation], we do not know if this meeting is online or face-to-face, or any other details around arrangements. This could be added to improve the response. The letter is organised and ideas can be followed but the sentences are not linked together well. There are some effective examples of reference [our | this] but, overall linking words are quite simple and repetitive [and], sometimes cohesive devices are not accurate [Althoug] and, often, missing altogether. This makes the response rather repetitive. Vocabulary is mixed. There are some effective examples [Junior position | vast experience | checked your agenda] but overall control is weak, with errors in word choice [meet me better | time] and spelling [beeing / being | fine / five | addicional / additional]. The grammatical range is limited and rather repetitive. There are some accurate structures and attempts at complexity [if], but overall structures are used repetitively, for example, most sentences start with [I] and tend to be short. Overall, the bullet points are covered, but to improve the score, more detail for bullet points 2 and 3 should be included. As well as effective paragraphing to support the organisation of ideas and greater accuracy and range in grammatical structures.
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Cambridge IELTS 21 · General Training Test 4

General Training · Task 2

Band7.0
Số từ
341
Dạng bài
Bài luận Task 2

Đề bài đầy đủ

Doctors tell us that we can get all the vitamins we need from having a healthy diet. Despite this advice, some people continue to spend large sums of money on vitamin pills. Why do you think some people spend a lot of money on vitamin pills? How could people be persuaded to improve their diet instead of buying vitamin pills?

Bài viết đầy đủ của thí sinh

Vitamins play a vital role for a healthy life. We can get all the vitamins we need from having a healthy balanced diet. Instead, Some people Spend large amount of money on vitamin pills. Firstly, Some people believe that they don’t get enough vitamins from their diet. So, they spend more money on vitamin pills. In fact, our body doesn’t need more than what we need. They believe taking vitamin pills on top of a healthy diet makes them more healthier without knowing the facts. Secondly, some people don’t like fruits and vegetables and they don’t get enough vitamins. In this case, with doctors advice they spend more money on vitamin pills. People Can get enough vitamins through a balanced diet. They can get enough vitamins by eating more vegetables and fruits. Vitamins are essential for all, especially growing children. Encouraging them by different tactics would make them eat healthy diet. For example, place colourful vegetables and fruits in a ‘face’ shape on their plate would attract them to try to eat. Teaching them from very young age to eat healthy foods are necessary for a healthy life. Moreover, awareness should be create about our diets and health. People can get ideas and knowledge about vitamins by watching videos and reading books that are relevant to vitamins and vitamin intakes. Additionally, people should be aware that taking vitamin pills without doctor’s advice is not advicable. Having said that, yoga can also helps a person to eat healthy. People whoever practices yoga in daily life said that, after practicing yoga they cannot put any unhealthy foods on their body. In conclusion, we can get enough vitamins by eating healthy diet like vegetables and fruits. Children should be encouraged from very young age to consume vegetables, fruits and milk or milk products (if they are tolerant to lactose). People should always Consider their doctors before taking vitamin pills. I believe that people can save more money if they started eating a healthy diet and not spend on vitamin pills which they don’t require.

Nhận xét đầy đủ của giám khảo

This is a strong response. It addresses the requirements of both parts of the task. There are two reasons given for spending money on vitamin pills in paragraph 2, followed by several tactics on how people can be persuaded to improve their diet instead. These ideas are extended and supported. Ideas are well organised and logically ordered, with ideas sequenced across 5 paragraphs. Cohesive devices are helpful, with linking words [Firstly | For example | Moreover | Additionally | Having said that] and reference [their | which]. Vocabulary is used well, with some good resource [play a vital role | balanced diet | different tactics | tolerant to lactose], there is some error with spelling [advicable / advisable] but, overall, a wider range of lexis would improve the score. Grammatical structure is mixed, with some multi-clause sentences, including conditionals [if] and modal forms [can | should] there are also a few slips and errors e.g. with the modal forms [should be create | can also helps], punctuation and missing articles. Again, the range is not sufficiently wide for a higher rating. This is a good response, with relevant content. To achieve a higher score, the range of vocabulary and grammatical structures should be increased.
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Cambridge IELTS 20 · Academic Test 1

Academic · Task 1

Band5.5
Số từ
181
Dạng bài
Academic Task 1

Đề bài đầy đủ

The first table below shows changes in the total population of New York City from 1800 to 2000. The second and third tables show changes in the population of the five districts of the city (Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten Island) over the same period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
Bảng cho đề IELTS Academic Task 1 về C20 a T1.

Bài viết đầy đủ của thí sinh

The first table shows changes in total population of New York city from 1800 to 2000. In 1800, New York's population was 79.216 then in 100 years the population sharply increased as over 4 times in 1800. Next 100 years, it still became more as it increased over twice as much as in 1800. Other two tables show changes of population in five different areas in New York. In 1800 Manhattan has 60.515 On the other hand other four areas, Brookly, Bronx, Queens and Staten Island had only 18.701. Manhattan has almost three times more than group of other four cities also. It had 76% of population in New York. It tells us Manhattan was the busiest city in New York. In 1900, Manhattan's populat increased sharply however, other broughs had bigger change. Population rate rise dramatically as 1587.109. In 2000 other broughs had 6471.089 and 81% of population of New York. On the other hand Manhattan's population has dicreased and it became only 19% of New York population. Last 200 years people chose to live differant cities in New York.

Nhận xét đầy đủ của giám khảo

This response is a good attempt at the task; however, selected information is limited and there are some inaccuracies. For example, data for Manhattan are minimal, and there is some inaccuracy, [in 1900 other broughs had bigger change]. There is also a small error in the final sentence, [chose to live differant cities], this should be 'different districts' because the city is New York City. The score is also impacted by the lack of an overview. The last sentence is an attempt at an overview, but is not sufficiently specific. The information is arranged coherently, with some good use of cohesive devices [then in | on the other hand | it | however] but there is repetition [on the other hand | in], and the range could be wider. Vocabulary is generally adequate, with some good examples [sharply increased | dramatically | chose to live], but there are some noticeable spelling errors [populat | dicreased | differant]. Similarly, grammatical range is limited in this response. Some good use of comparative structures [increased over twice as much as | has almost three times more than | was the busiest]; however, there are errors, including choice of tenses and missing articles.
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Cambridge IELTS 20 · Academic Test 1

Academic · Task 2

Band6.5
Số từ
349
Dạng bài
Bài luận Task 2

Đề bài đầy đủ

Access to clean water is a basic human right. Therefore, every home should have a water supply that is provided free of charge. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

Bài viết đầy đủ của thí sinh

Access to pure clean water is for sure a necessary right for all human beings. It is one of the things needed to survive on this planet. Now, some people might argue that only and only water is required and the state of cleanliness of it should be a secondary thing to ensure, while other argue that there is no point in having water which, in some cases is not clean. can result to be fatal. However all this debate comes down to one point whether or not this water shall be free of cost for humans. Let us look at it from a more fimiliar approach. All humans on earth have free will and a sight to life; what will happen if one day someone comes up to us and says that is is he or she who owns the air that we breathe in and just like that forces us to pay for over lives. This would not be acceptable to any human and they would be taking measures against. Just like that our earth was created with all the water it had even before humans came into existence hence proving us that no person or no government is the sole protector of the earth's water resources. Water was created for the dwellers of soil and creatures of the sea and all mankind to utilize. The creator of it did not ask us to pay for it by any means of money then who are we to charge for such a basic thing which we do not even own? We all have seen countries going to war claiming the ownership of the water resources and if one of them does win all the effort goes down to nothing when in the end they tax their own countrymen for it. It is clear that access to clean water is a basic human right. Therefore every home should have water supply is free. It is the responsibility of the authorities to look after the needs of the people as it them who declared clean water as a basic right.

Nhận xét đầy đủ của giám khảo

This is a good response that provides relevant ideas. The writer expresses their position, and agrees with the statement that access to clean water should be free, although there is some repetition and some lack of clarity within the main ideas expressed. There are supporting arguments that include: whether any kind of water, or only 'clean water' should be provided, whether people should be allowed to 'own' the air we breathe and force people to pay for it, whether any person should be the [sole protector] of the water supply and whether the aim is to [tax their own countrymen] for water. The conclusion states that governments have declared that clean water is a basic right, and so they should look after the needs of the people, and provide [every home] with a free water supply. Ideas are generally logically organised, but there is a lack of progression around the sections that refer to the ownership of water on planet earth, with repetition across three paragraphs (2, 3 and 4). However, generally, ideas are arranged in order and we can follow the progression through the response. Cohesive devices are used to some good effect, including referencing within sentences [while | us | who | their own countrymen]. However, paragraphing is not used effectively to sequence ideas, so more effective paragraphing could increase the score. There are some strong examples of vocabulary [comes down to one point | forces us to | look after the needs of] with some higher-level collocation. However, the level of error is quite high and detracts from the score for lexis. Grammatical range is also fairly wide, but again, the errors and missing punctuation mean that the response cannot score more highly. To achieve a higher score, the candidate should provide greater clarity when extending the main ideas, and use more effective paragraphing to organise ideas and improve progression.
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Cambridge IELTS 20 · Academic Test 2

Academic · Task 1

Band6.0
Số từ
244
Dạng bài
Academic Task 1

Đề bài đầy đủ

The plans below show the site of a farm in 1950 and the same site today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
Bản đồ cho đề IELTS Academic Task 1 về C20 a T1.

Bài viết đầy đủ của thí sinh

If we look at the pictures we will see how Beechwood Farm has changed along the time. Years ago, in 1950, Beachwood Farm was a tipycal farm. A track crossed the farm, so farmers could reach the barn and the farmhouse passing by the fruit trees, and the place where the soft fruits and the vegetables were growing. At the opposite side of the truck, was the field where the sheeps were situated. That was close to the farmhouse, were chickens were also situated. All the farm was sourrounded, at the south, by a river. Nowadeys, the farm has suffered changes. Modern life brought to the farm some needs to survive. The main change was the road that replaced the track. Now is easyer to arrive any place in the farm. There is a parking zone near the road where the sheeps used to eat grass. We can also find a camping field and Solar panels in that zone. Another parking zone can be find where the solar panels are situated. Just in front of the first parking zone we can see a farm shop. The old barn was replaced for a holiday cottoges, and relocated close to the chickens, near the river. Lot of things have changed since 1950, and Beechwood Farm is not an exception. Modern times had come, and everyone had to be adjusted to new ways of living. We still have Beechwood Farm, but a new sophisticated and modern one.

Nhận xét đầy đủ của giám khảo

This response addresses all of the changes illustrated in the farm plans. The writer describes how the farm looked in 1950, then moves on to the present-day plan. There is an overview in the last paragraph [Lot of things have changed since 1950, and Beechwood Farm ... a new sophisticated and modern one] but it does not mention the link to attracting visitors, so is not complete. Information is generally arranged coherently. The first two paragraphs cover the 1950s site, with the remainder focused on the farm today. There is evidence of linking expressions [At the opposite side | That | Nowadeys]; however, there is a lack of reference, resulting in repetition [farm | zone]. Vocabulary is generally good [parking zone | relocated | exception | adjusted | sophisticated] but errors remain [along the time / over time | tipycal | sourrounded | Nowadeys | easyer | cottoges]. Grammatical range is mixed. There are examples of complex sentence forms, including [If] clauses and modal forms [could reach | can also find] but there are also a range of errors which preclude a higher score. To improve the score, an overview that summarises the main changes should be added. It would also be beneficial to show greater accuracy in vocabulary and use of grammatical structures.
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Cambridge IELTS 20 · Academic Test 2

Academic · Task 2

Band7.0
Số từ
306
Dạng bài
Bài luận Task 2

Đề bài đầy đủ

In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays. What is the value of long school holidays? What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

Bài viết đầy đủ của thí sinh

In today's world, education is a must to every child and individual across every country. The duration of summer holidays became a major thing in terms of priority in some countries like in middle eastern location. Where as cold countries which experience long winters have concentrated less on summer holidays giving only few weeks for summer vacations. On the other side, a regular family would like to spend most of the time in summer holidays by travelling to their homeland, meeting their relatives and seek long durations for summer, so that children can spend valuable time with cousins and relatives making valuable memories. On the other hand, some parents who work 365 days would find it difficult to take care of children during summer holidays as they have to work and prefer shorter period of holidays. This has become a major problem and is affecting children in a bad way. Childhood is to cherish some good valuable memories along with studies. Longer summer breaks allow the children to make time to visit family relatives and this early relationship helps to maintain a stronger bond for the rest of the life. Once they are out of school, they have to work and make a living for themselves where they won't find time for their loved ones. Coming to shorter school holidays, they help the children from falling back in studies (or) having interest. With longer duration of holidays children take a lot of time to get back their concentration after the school starts. It has both positive and negative side to it. Shorter school holidays help the student to maintain concentration, performance but at the same time they won't form special bonds which are really important. From my perspective, maintaining strong relationship bonds is more important than just education which requires a longer duration of summer holidays.

Nhận xét đầy đủ của giám khảo

This is an appropriate response, with a series of ideas for each part, presented effectively. It starts with a note that different countries have different patterns. The value of long holidays include families being able to travel and spend time with relatives, as once children leave school, they won't have the free time to develop these strong bonds. The arguments for shorter holidays mention families where parents work and cannot take so much leave, and that it helps children not to fall behind in their studies. The candidate concludes that stronger family bonds are more important, so longer holidays are best. There is some minor repetition in the ideas presented. Ideas are logically organised, and cohesive devices are varied. Reference is used [This | they | their] but some inaccuracy in linking devices [Where as | On the otherside | Coming to], and some repetition [relatives | valuable] limits the rating in this area. Vocabulary is a strength, with frequent high-level content and some skilful collocation [spend valuable time | affecting children | maintain a stronger bond]. Some errors remain [falling back / falling behind]. Grammatical structures are also varied and show some flexibility and some multi-clause sentences. However, most sentences are not error-free, as there are slips with prepositions [to every child / for every child | in holiday / on holiday] and plurals [shorter period of holidays | side / sides] and some missing punctuation. To achieve a higher score, the candidate could explore the 'value of long holidays' and 'arguments for shorter holidays' in more depth. A greater degree of accuracy in vocabulary and grammatical structures would also improve the score.