The maps below show a beachfront area in Australia in 1950 and today.
Sample Response
The two mapsThey yielded two maps that demonstrate a beachfront area in 1950 and in Australia todaypresently in Australia.
Overall, the major changes have occurred around the beachmajor changes are surrounding the beach where two surf clubs and a restaurant have openedclubs and restaurants open now and the road has been extendedthe new road is made.
In 1950, a road to the car parka car parking road was connected to the city roadconnected to city road and alongside that road was round playgroundround shape play ground and dining tables. There were two pools of the same sizeThere was two same dimensions pool, and one was on the east side while the other was on the west sidewhile another was on the west side of the beach. Both poolsThe pool were 25 metres longwas 25 meters long. Additionally, one pavilion was between car parking and dining tables, a small lighthouse beside the east pool.
Currently, we can see dramatic changes, primarily in the road. Now the road no longer ends at the car parkis not ending at car parking. It has been extended to the lighthouseIt developed to the lighthouse, and it’s U-shapedin u shape. The dining tables and pavilion are unchangedNo change for dining tables and pavilion; however, a small car parksmall car parking takes the place of the playground. Another car park area is increased on the southwest side, pool dimensions double than 1950, and open restaurants. One new advancement surf club is the backside of 50m pool, and one is the 25m pool backside.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response is clearly divided by time period and covers many important physical changes, including the extended road, added parking, restaurant, surf clubs, and enlarged pool. The overview is too limited, and several locations or changes are expressed inaccurately or unclearly because grammar and word choice are unstable. The priority is to give a fuller overview and describe each change with precise map language and controlled sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response identifies most major additions and alterations, but the overview is narrow and some locations and developments are imprecisely described.
Summarize the overall expansion of facilities and access, then locate each new feature accurately relative to the beach and lighthouse.
Coherence and Cohesion
Organizing the description into 1950 and current sections creates clear overall progression, although some linking and sentence sequencing are mechanical.
Group unchanged features separately from additions and extensions so each paragraph develops one clear comparison.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is adequate for the map and includes relevant terms, but awkward choices such as open restaurants and backside reduce naturalness and precision.
Use precise map phrases such as was built, was enlarged, remained unchanged, and to the west or east of.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mixture of sentence forms is attempted, but frequent agreement, article, comparison, and fragment errors reduce control.
Review plural agreement and comparative structures, and ensure every sentence contains a complete subject and finite verb.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The maps below show a beachfront area in Australia in 1950 and today.
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