The pie chart below shows the percentage of five kinds of books sold by a bookseller between 1972 and 2012.
Sample Response
1992 and 2012. The data has been calculated in numbers. To begininitiate with, the largest share was for other bookslion’s share of other books were sold in 1972. Whereas, one-fifth(20%) percentage of books word sold form adult, children and biography categories. But, only a tiny fraction of travel books were sold in 1972. Moreover, inIn 1992, the largest share of salesmajority of sales were from adult fictionadult fiction novels. Additionally, around 20% of children’s fictionChildren’s frictions and other books were sold by the bookseller. But the tiny ratio of people liked to purchased travel and biography books 18% and 15% respectively.
On the other hand, inIn 2012, most people(45%) were inclined to purchase adult fiction. Furthermore,25% of sales came from children’s novels. However, approximately 10% of book sales wereare from travel and other categories. Thus, a small sharean ant share of biography books was sold by a bookseller in 2012.
In conclusion, itIt is clear from the chartscrystal clear from the entire intimation that adult fiction had the largest share of salesmost people like to purchase adult fiction, but only a few people are interested in buying travel books throughout the time period.
Why this response received Band 5.0
The response covers all three years and reports several figures accurately, with chronological organization that makes the broad pattern understandable. Its main limitation is an imprecise overview, especially the claim that adult fiction dominated and travel was least popular throughout, while frequent awkward or erroneous phrasing sometimes strains clarity. Prioritize a fully accurate trend-based overview and then edit sentence structure, agreement, and word choice.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response addresses all three charts and includes many correct values, but the overview misrepresents the categories that dominated or were smallest across the period.
Summarize the main changes accurately, highlighting the sharp rise in adult fiction and the declines in biography, travel, and other books.
Coherence and Cohesion
The chronological sequence is easy to follow, but fragments and repetitive linking words make the progression mechanical and occasionally abrupt.
Use complete sentences and group the details into a clear 1972-to-2012 comparison rather than introducing nearly every point with a connector.
Lexical Resource
Some topic vocabulary is attempted, but frequent spelling and word-choice errors such as “frictions,” “intimation,” and “ant share” reduce precision.
Use straightforward chart language such as proportion, accounted for, rose, and declined, checking spelling and collocation carefully.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Frequent errors in sentence formation, agreement, articles, tense, and verb patterns sometimes make relationships difficult to understand.
Prioritize complete subject-verb sentences and accurate comparative structures, then proofread every verb form and noun phrase.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The pie chart below shows the percentage of five kinds of books sold by a bookseller between 1972 and 2012.
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