The charts show information about the number of kilometres travelled in an average month and the distribution of vehicle types in Britain.
Sample Response
The chart illustrates the numberdistance of kilometres covered by travelling in three different purposesmods over 20 years and the pie chart depicts the distribution of vehicle typesnumber of vehicles issued in Britain.
Overall, it is immediately apparent from both charts that the greatest distance was travelled for transport and deliverymaximum distance was covered with transport & delivery. Meanwhile, cars were the most popular vehicle and accounted for the largest share in both yearshad the highest sales over the years.
In detail, the highest kilometres travelled for transport and delivery began at approximately 6,500 kmat nearby 6500 km in 1990, surprisingly this ratio rose by about 1,300 kmskyrocketed by 15,00 km and hit its peak at about 7,800 kmat an explosive 8000 km in 1995 following this figure remained unchangedthis ratio was remained unchanged for next five years. Unfortunately, this trend turned negative and plummeted to 7,000 km in 2005, five years laternext by five years, and this number went down sharply to reach its lowest point at 6,000 kmhit bottom at 6000 km in the final year. Moreover, 3000 km were covered by people in a month with a personal purpose in 1990, and this value rose steadily to 3,500 kmis steadily fairly inclined at 3500 km after a slight recovery this figure fellthis number got crashed at 3000 km 2010. therefore, around 1900 km was done by commuters in 1990, and this number remained the same for the next 15 years, but this value rose byto about 500 km in 2010.
Furthermore, according to the sales of vehicle types in 1990 the highest mode of transport was cars, which accounted for 63% in 1990Car which issued with shares at 63% in 1980 but this number got declined by 4% after 20 years. Following this, 25% of trucks were distributed in 1994 generalities this rate increased by 5% after 20 years in Britain. It is interesting to note that the rest three modes of vehicles had a minor distribution in 20 years which were buses, motorcycles and others, with shares at 6%, 9% and 2% in 1990. Still, this number had slight changes at 5% of buses 3% of motorcycles in the last only 3% of other vehicles distributed in 2010.
Why this response received Band 5.0
The response provides a recognizable structure and identifies the dominant travel purpose and vehicle type, with several figures reported correctly. Its main weakness is accuracy: dates, commuting data, and some vehicle shares are misstated, while imprecise wording and frequent sentence-level errors make parts difficult to follow. The priority is to verify every value against the visuals and present comparisons in shorter, grammatically controlled sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A clear overview and several broadly correct figures are included, but multiple dates, vehicle shares, and commuting values are inaccurate.
Check every year and value against both charts, especially the commuting endpoint and the motorcycle shares.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response uses an appropriate introduction, overview, and detail grouping, but long run-on sentences and awkward linking weaken progression.
Divide the detail paragraphs into shorter comparison units and use connectors only where the relationship is clear.
Lexical Resource
There is some range in trend vocabulary, but frequent unsuitable collocations such as figures being issued or crashed reduce precision.
Use standard data-reporting combinations such as rose to, fell by, remained stable, and accounted for.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex structures are attempted, but frequent errors in clause boundaries, verb forms, articles, and sentence construction often strain clarity.
Build accurate simple and compound sentences first, then add controlled subordinate clauses without comma splices.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The charts show information about the number of kilometres travelled in an average month and the distribution of vehicle types in Britain.
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