The Map of a City in 1950 and now.
Sample Response
There are two maps available for a city for two different years, 1950 and the presentsuch as for 1950 and for now. They illustrateIt illustrates the difference between what was before and now in five featurescriteria such as business district, residential area, government building, major road and bridge.
In 1950, the city population was 20,000 while it is 200,000 now, which is ten times the 1950 figureten times than 1950. With the increase of population, other constructions are also expanding than before. We can easily identify that in 1950 only the north side of the riverthe only north side of the river had a business district and residential area available, and only one government building was there on the south sidein Southside.
At the current time, the river water is conserved by manufacturing a dam on the east side and making a lake to utilize the water. On both the north and south sides,Both north and south side business districts and residential areas are now presentare available now. Now there are two bridges connectingtwo main roads to connect the north and south regions and two government buildings on the south sidein the south zone while in 1950 there was only one of eachboth were only one for each.
The business district has becomebecomes a central part of the city, and residential areas surround itcover it from all sides. The airport area also expands almost 3 times than before to handle the rise of the population. Now south zone also has the road from the west to the central zone.
In conclusion, there has been a major change in the period shownlast five decades and a substantial expansion of residential areashigh increases of a residential area.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response identifies several major changes and supports them with relevant map details, particularly the population growth, new lake and dam, expanded development south of the river, and additional infrastructure. However, its overview is too general, and some descriptions are imprecise or potentially unsupported, while frequent awkward collocations and comparison forms reduce accuracy. Prioritize a clear overview of the city's overall expansion and reorganize details into precise, map-based comparisons.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response covers many important changes accurately, but the overview is vague and some claims are imprecise or insufficiently grounded in the maps.
Summarize the dominant expansion across the river and the addition of the lake, dam, roads, and bridge before giving precise spatial details.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information progresses logically from the earlier city to the present layout, although paragraphing and repeated use of now make the organisation somewhat mechanical.
Group all 1950 features together and all present-day changes together, using varied referencing rather than repeatedly starting sentences with now.
Lexical Resource
There is adequate vocabulary for describing maps and change, but frequent unsuitable collocations such as manufacturing a dam and high increases reduce precision.
Use standard map-description phrases such as constructed a dam, expanded substantially, and ten times the earlier population.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures conveys the main meaning, but comparison forms, articles, agreement, and prepositions are frequently inaccurate.
Check comparative structures and noun phrases carefully, especially ten times the 1950 figure, larger than before, and the south side.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The Map of a City in 1950 and now.
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