The Pie chart gives information about the country of birth of people living in Australia and the table shows where people born in these countries live.
Sample Response
The pie chart illustrates the proportion of people living in Australia who were born in different countrieswith different nationalities, while the table indicates the distribution of these people in cities and rural areas.
Overall, the majorityit can be seen that the majority of Australia’s population was born in Australiathis country. In addition, most peoplemost of people in Australia live in urban areas.
As can be seen from the pie chart, People born in Australia accounted forAustralia accounted for the largest share, at 73%the greatest percentage of 73%, which is about ten times as large as the UK figureabout 7 times higher than that of the UK. It is noticeable that the people who were born in New Zealand, China and Netherlands merely made up small proportions, with 1%, 2% and 3% respectively. Besides, 14%nearly one-fourth of Australia’s population comescome from other countries.
Turning to the tableMoving on, the UK and the NetherlandsUK and Netherlands share the same percentage of people living in rural areas, with about 10%, which is double that of New Zealand. WhileSurprisingly, while the figure for AustraliansAustralian living in cities is 83%only 83%, the figure for Chinese people is exactly 99%that of Chinese constitute exactly 99%.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response has a clear overview and an easy-to-follow structure, and it selects figures from both components of the task. Its main weakness is data accuracy and coverage: several birth percentages are assigned to the wrong countries, the 14% Other share is overstated, and the table discussion is selective. Check each label carefully and compare all major urban-rural patterns before polishing language.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response provides an overview and some relevant comparisons, but it swaps the New Zealand and Netherlands percentages, describes 14% as nearly one-fourth, and gives limited table coverage.
Verify every country label and percentage, then summarise the dominant urban pattern with a broader set of accurate comparisons from the table.
Coherence and Cohesion
Clear paragraphing and a logical movement from overview to pie-chart details and table details make the report easy to follow.
Strengthen cohesion further by linking the two detail sections through meaningful comparisons rather than relying on general transitions such as “Moving on.”
Lexical Resource
A good range of reporting and comparison vocabulary is used, though several choices are imprecise, including “nationalities,” “Australia accounted,” and “Australian living.”
Use precise forms such as “countries of birth,” “Australian-born residents,” and “people born in China” consistently.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses varied complex structures with generally clear meaning, but recurring article, agreement, and noun-form errors reduce accuracy.
Review subject-verb agreement and plural forms in phrases such as “most people,” “the figure for Australians,” and “that for Chinese-born residents.”
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The Pie chart gives information about the country of birth of people living in Australia and the table shows where people born in these countries live.
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