The illustration below shows the proportions of people living in different types of houses in three different areas in 2012 in Denmark.
Sample Response
The table data compares people’s accommodation in Green Park area, Central area and Central Park area in Denmark in 2012. The types of accommodation listed are terrace houses, semi-detached houses, detached houses and bungalows. Overall, Green Park residents mainly lived in terrace housesGreen park inhabitants preferred terrace houses, while most of the citizens in the Central area lived in terrace housesterrace-houses and bungalows, whereas the main housing typebungalows while the main housing type in Central Park area was the bungalowwas Bungalows. According to the table data, three-quarters of the populationthe two-third populace in the Green Park area in DenmarkGreen Park area in Denmark lived in terrace houses in 2012. 15% lived in detached houses while the remaining 10% were evenly split betweenequally distributed in semi-detached houses and bungalowssemi-terrace houses and Bungalows. Again, TerraceTerrance houses and bungalowsBungalows were the two most common housing types in the Central area accounting for 45% and 35% of residents, respectivelywith 45% and 35% dwellers respectively. 15% of people15% people in this area livedwere in semi-detached houses and the remaining 5% lived in detached housesand the remaining in detached houses. Finally, bungalowsBungalows were the primary accommodation type in the Central Park areain Central Park are accounting for 65% of residentswith 65% dwellers. One-quarter of residentsOne-quarter residents preferred terrace houses and the remaining 10% of residentsthe remaining one-tenth people were evenly split between semi-detached and detached houseslived in either a semi-detached or a detached house.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response gives a clear overview and covers nearly all categories, with most figures and comparisons accurately selected. Its main weakness is precision: Green Park terrace housing is reported as about two thirds rather than 75%, while several awkward or incorrect noun phrases reduce fluency. Prioritise exact data reporting and revise article, plural, and quantifier constructions.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A clear overview and almost complete coverage are provided, but the principal Green Park figure is inaccurately reported as two thirds instead of 75%.
Verify every percentage against the table and state the 75% Green Park terrace-house share exactly.
Coherence and Cohesion
The information progresses logically from an overview to the three areas, although the single-paragraph presentation and repeated linking are less polished.
Separate the overview from the detailed comparisons and vary links to avoid repeated use of while.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a reasonably varied housing vocabulary, but misspellings and awkward choices such as semi-terrace houses reduce precision.
Use the chart labels consistently and proofread terms such as terraced, semi-detached, and bungalow.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of sentence structures communicates the comparisons clearly, despite recurring errors with quantifiers, articles, agreement, and noun phrases.
Practise accurate percentage structures such as 15% of people and one quarter of residents.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The illustration below shows the proportions of people living in different types of houses in three different areas in 2012 in Denmark.
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