The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.
Sample Response
As we can see the map of town Garlsdon where a new supermarket is about to be established soon.
The total population of the town is 65,000, and we will be discussing the two outcomes possible for the site to be planned.
To begin with, the first siteplan is located inis covering the countryside area where there is the sparsely populated surroundingsleast population which, as a result,which in result will lead to less crowd and ample of space for parking your vehicles. With that said, the population of the countryside is near about 10,000 and is 12 KM away from Hindon.
Secondly, the second siteother plan is exactly the opposite of the first one, which is locatedfeaturing in the middle of the town surrounded by housing and industrysurrounding the industries. Moreover, the site is in a traffic-free zoneno traffic zone which will also make it eco-friendly and greener due to less pollution. AdditionallyTo add further, the site is 16 km awayat 16KM away from BransdonBrandson with a population of 15,000 and 25 kmKM away from Cransdon with a population of 29,000Delete, which makes it a prime location for more business.
To conclude, the second site plan suits me the most as it is in the prime location with more population covering which will profit the supermarket in terms of business.
Why this response received Band 5.0
The response is easiest to follow when it treats the two proposed sites in separate paragraphs and identifies S1 as rural and S2 as central. Its task coverage is weakened by the absence of a factual overview and by unsupported claims about parking, pollution, and commercial suitability, while important access features are missed; prioritise an objective comparison of location, transport links, nearby land use, and population reach.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response identifies the basic locations of both sites but lacks a clear overview, omits important road and railway features, and adds several unsupported interpretations.
Replace the personal recommendation with an objective overview and compare S1 and S2 accurately by location, transport access, surrounding land use, and nearby populations.
Coherence and Cohesion
The separate treatment of the two sites creates a visible progression, although the introduction, isolated population paragraph, and subjective conclusion weaken the overall structure.
Use a compact introduction and overview before two balanced detail paragraphs, linking comparisons directly instead of relying on mechanical sequencing phrases.
Lexical Resource
There is some topic-related range, but frequent unnatural combinations such as 'ample of space' and 'more population covering' reduce precision.
Use accurate map-description vocabulary and natural collocations for accessibility, distance, population, land use, and location.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response attempts complex sentences, but frequent problems with articles, prepositions, clause construction, and agreement sometimes strain meaning.
Build shorter complete sentences first, then check articles and prepositions carefully when adding relative or comparison clauses.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.
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