The table below highlights data on the number of travellers using three major German airports between 2007 and 2012.
Sample Response
The tableyielded table illustrates the number of airport visitors in three majorprime airports in Germany between 2007 andto 2012. Travellers are given in millions per year.
Overall, the number of travellersyear by year traveller number rosewas rose; Frankfurt airport had the most visitorshad most visitors whereas in Berlin Tegel the number of travellers was the lowesttravellers number was least in starting and last given years. Throughout the period, dramatic growth was seendramatic growth has been seen in Berlin Tegal, which had more than twice as many travellersmore than double sightseer after 5 years.
For Dusseldorf, in 2007, 27.2 million people preferredprefer to travel by this airport which grew dramatically and reached a peaktouched to a zenith point of 48.2 millionMillion after a couple of years. After 2009 traveller number was declined to 9 million in 2010 and had 45.6 in 2012. Between that period dip was 33.2 visitors in 2011. For Berlin Tegal, 17.3 passengers were in 2007, which increased to roughly 10 million travellers after 2009. From 2010 to 2012 the figure remained constant athad the same sightseer on account of 43.3 m
For Frankfurt, we can clearly see the growth of visitors, it had more than twice as many travellers asit had above the double sightseer than Berlin Tegal which rose continuouslywhich jump up continually, and after 3 years it had 11 million more travellers. In 2012 the number of visitors was almost double what it waswas double than five years earlierbefore a half decades.
Why this response received Band 5.0
The response identifies the broad upward movement and attempts to compare all three airports, providing a recognizable structure. However, several figures and trends are reported inaccurately or unclearly, while frequent grammatical and word-choice errors sometimes obstruct the comparisons. The highest priority is to verify each value against the table and express a few accurate start-to-end comparisons in straightforward sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A discernible overview and coverage of all airports are present, but several key figures and trend descriptions are inaccurate or unclear.
Check every stated value against the table and compare the correct 2007 and 2012 figures for each airport.
Coherence and Cohesion
Paragraphing creates a basic progression from overview to airport details, though connections within sentences are often difficult to follow.
Organize details consistently by airport and use simple time links to show rises, falls, and stable periods.
Lexical Resource
The response attempts some varied trend vocabulary, but frequent inappropriate choices such as sightseer and yielded reduce precision.
Use standard Task 1 terms such as passengers, figures, rose, fell, peaked, and remained stable accurately.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Frequent errors in agreement, articles, tense, comparison forms, and sentence construction regularly strain clarity.
Build shorter complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then check tense and number agreement throughout.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The table below highlights data on the number of travellers using three major German airports between 2007 and 2012.
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