The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Sample Response
The maps outline the changes that took place in a public park called Grange Park from 1920 to today. Overall, the park was redevelopedwas changed and renovated to offer people more recreational facilitiesmore possibilities than they used to have decades ago such as a café, amphitheatre, children's play area and underground parkingcafe, theatre, playground and parking. In detaildetails, the park was opened in 1920 and new facilities, including an amphitheatre and a children's play areaentertainment facilities including a larger stage and various areas for recreation have since been added to it. There was also a notable relocationThere was also notable relocation of the seatingin terms of seats and the only areas that remained unchanged were the entrances and the north-west rose gardenone minor garden. Besides, the fountain has been removed in favour of a rose garden with seating on all four sidesfull seating arrangements around it. To the left of the new garden, the former musicians' stageprevious stage for musicians has been turned into a much larger amphitheatre facing the opposite direction and used for concerts in the parkfacing the opposite direction that will allow for concerts in the park. This change has necessitated the removal of both seating areasboth seatings on the far left side as well as the rose garden in the bottom left corner of the map. Moreover, the pond for water plants was removed from the top-right part of the parkright -top part of the garden and a children's play area was introduced in the right-top of the park, and near this area, a cafe was built. Instead of the pond, a water feature now occupieshas been built occupying the bottom right corner. Interestingly, the number of rose gardens was reduced to two. Besides, an underground car park was built in the lower right corner of the park.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response gives a clear overview of the park's modernisation and covers nearly all major changes with specific spatial detail. Its main weakness is occasional imprecision, particularly the suggestion that the water feature directly replaced the pond, alongside some awkward wording and limited paragraphing. Group the changes by area of the park and distinguish the separate replacements in the northeast and southeast more exactly.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The overview and detailed account cover the principal additions, removals, and retained features, with only minor spatial imprecision about what replaced the pond.
Clarify that the children's play area occupies the former pond area, while the water feature is on the former glasshouse side of the park.
Coherence and Cohesion
The description moves logically from the central and western changes to the eastern side, but one dense details paragraph and repeated additive linkers limit structural clarity.
Use two body paragraphs organised by the western and central changes versus the eastern changes, with fewer uses of besides and moreover.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is varied and often precise for describing redevelopment, although forms such as in details, seatings, and right-top are unnatural.
Use idiomatic map language such as in detail, seating areas, upper right, and facilities rather than possibilities.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses a wide range of complex structures with generally good control, despite occasional article, number, and phrasing errors.
Proofread fixed expressions and countability, especially in detail, seating, and references to locations on the map.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
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