The plans below show the home and plans for its redevelopment.
Sample Response
The plansyielded pictures show the current home and the proposed redevelopmentcurrent home plans and after advancement.
Overall, it can be clearly seen that study/ bedroom number will increase, and all areas will use.
In the current planPresently, the entrance is inon the southwest corner and next to theits hall. To the east of the entranceThe opposite side of the entrance are a study/bedroom and the kitchenis the study/bedroom and kitchen. North and Southside of the surrounded home is garden. The living room and study/bedroom are next to each other. Another study or bedroom is north of the entranceis the entrance north side.
After development, the entrance will remainentrance remained the same. Study/bedroom number will be 5, on the east side, two and centre of the kitchen and the social area will develop. Moreover, the northern section will contain study/bedroomsthe whole north part will study are. The garden will remainThe Garden will same, but parking will be added along the southern sideparking will develop in the south direction. The ensuite bathroom will also be builtwill also build, and one study/bedroom will be createdone study or bedroom create next to the entrance. The central remaining spaceThe rest of the space will be a hall.
Why this response received Band 4.5
The response has a useful present-versus-redevelopment structure and correctly notes the rise to five study/bedrooms, the new parking area, and the ensuite. However, several major changes are omitted or inaccurately described, including the removal of the living room, reduction of garden space, and reconfiguration of the kitchen and bathroom, while frequent grammatical errors obscure meaning. Prioritise an accurate overview and systematic room-by-room comparisons in complete sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response identifies some important additions but provides an imprecise overview and omits or misstates several substantial layout changes.
Summarise the conversion to denser study accommodation, then accurately compare the living room, garden, kitchen, bathrooms, parking, and bedrooms.
Coherence and Cohesion
Separate paragraphs for the current and proposed plans provide basic progression, though relationships between rooms are often presented unclearly.
Move methodically around each plan in the same direction and link each existing feature directly to its proposed change.
Lexical Resource
Some relevant map vocabulary is used, but restricted and inaccurate choices such as yielded pictures and after advancement frequently weaken precision.
Build a reliable set of redevelopment verbs and location phrases, including replace, relocate, convert, expand, adjacent to, and along the eastern side.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Frequent errors in articles, agreement, verb forms, and sentence construction regularly make descriptions difficult to follow.
Write complete subject-verb clauses and check every passive future form, for example will be built, will remain, and will be converted.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The plans below show the home and plans for its redevelopment.
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