The illustration shows information about how an igloo is built from snow.
Sample Response
The diagram illustrates the process that is used to build an igloo from snow.
There are five main stages in this process, starting with finding an area covered by hard-packed snow and culminating in covering the entrance hole with snow blocks.
As can be seen from the process, after an area of hard-packed snowa surface of hard-packed snow is found, a snow saw is used to cut snow blocks to the specified dimensionslarge blocks to the appropriate size to build the base. The edges of the blocks are then smoothed with the saw and are placed in a circle, and a hole is dug under the wall to make an entrance. Next, a slightly over-sized block is positioned over the final opening at the top of the iglooprecisely shaped and placed on the top of the igloo.
In the next stageOut of the remaining steps, snow is shoveled onto the outside of the igloo and is packed into all crevices while the internal surface of the igloo is smoothed by hand. Any excess snow is also removed from the igloo's surfacefrom the inside of the igloo. Finally,And finally, a hole is dug in the shape of the entrance, and is then covered with snow blocks to complete the igloo.
Why this response received Band 8.0
The response is strongest in its clear chronological coverage of almost the entire construction process, supported by an effective overview and generally precise process language. Its main limitation is that a few visual details—especially the block dimensions and explicit upward construction—are omitted, while occasional awkward reference and phrasing slightly weaken clarity. Prioritise fuller selection of diagram-specific details and tighten sentence references so each action clearly applies to the correct object.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response provides a clear overview and accurately covers nearly all stages, although the block dimensions and explicit upward construction are omitted.
Include a few more distinctive visual details, such as the block measurements and the upward circular arrangement, to make the account fully comprehensive.
Coherence and Cohesion
The stage-by-stage sequence is logical and the paragraphing is effective, despite the awkward transition into the final stages.
Use direct chronological transitions between stages so the progression remains consistently natural and precise.
Lexical Resource
A wide range of precise process vocabulary, including “hard-packed,” “crevices,” and “excess,” is used accurately with only occasional awkward phrasing.
Replace less natural expressions such as “Out of the remaining steps” with concise, idiomatic process language.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A varied range of complex passive structures is handled accurately, with only a minor reference problem where “the edges” appear to be placed in a circle.
Check coordination and pronoun reference carefully so every passive action has an unmistakably correct subject.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The illustration shows information about how an igloo is built from snow.
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