The maps below show the town of Langley in 1910 and 1950.
Sample Response
The mapslayouts demonstrate the changes mademodifications done in the town of Langleya city named Langley from 1910 to 1950. Overall, townhouses, the factoryfactories, wastelands, and the railway linerailway lines and the railway workers' cottagesalong with the cottages were either removedor replaced, or they got replaced.
Firstly, the townhouses on Jordan Street in 1910 were replaced bygot substituted by the newly constructed flatsFlats in 1950. Moreover, the factory was replaced byfactory got replaced with magnificent Sherman Mansions, and the laundry and café were shifted in 1950 to the wasteland right next to the factory from the 1910 map.
Furthermore, a new street named New Lane was introduced in 1950, and the only store present in the city in 1910 was shifted to the right side was that lane along with the addition of two new stores; earlier, this place consisted of railway cottages, café and laundry place.
Lastly, the houses on Sherman Street, the wasteland, together withwasteland along with the railway cottages to its easton its right and the railway line weregot replaced by Sherman Parkpark, which containedhad a children’s play area and a ponda pond in it.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response identifies the major redevelopment accurately and covers most important replacements, including the flats, Sherman Mansions, New Lane, the stores, and Sherman Park. Its paragraph sequence is easy to follow, but mechanical linking, awkward wording, and a poorly controlled long sentence reduce clarity. The highest priority is to express each location change in a shorter, grammatically complete sentence with precise spatial language.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A clear overview and generally accurate details describe most major changes between 1910 and 1950, although the overall transformation could be characterized more fully.
Strengthen the overview by summarizing the shift from industrial and railway land to residential, commercial, and recreational uses.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response follows a logical sequence and uses clear paragraphing, but the repeated sequence markers and one overloaded sentence make cohesion somewhat mechanical.
Group changes by area and use fewer formulaic links, splitting the New Lane and store description into two focused sentences.
Lexical Resource
There is sufficient range for the task, including 'substituted,' 'introduced,' and 'consisted of,' but some choices are imprecise or unnecessarily subjective.
Use neutral map language such as 'was replaced by' and 'was relocated' instead of repetitive 'got replaced' or subjective wording such as 'magnificent.'
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses both simple and complex forms, but errors in clause structure, articles, capitalization, and coordination recur and occasionally disrupt reading.
Control relative and passive clauses more carefully, especially by rewriting 'was shifted to the right side was that lane' as a complete and correctly ordered sentence.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The maps below show the town of Langley in 1910 and 1950.
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