The diagram details the process of making leather products.
Sample Response
The given diagram illustrates the eleven stages through which leather is turnedin which leather turned into shoes, women'sWomen’s purses, and other productsstaff. Overall, during the process, the material is transportedleather is transferred to the factory twicetwo times, first for treatmentonce for tanning and then for manufacturing leather products.
Once the animal skin has been driedOnce that animal skin is dried, it will be transported to a factorymoved to the company, and then it will be washed with water and limelime juice. The leather must rest in the same liquid to intake it, which takes a while. To flatten the leatherFor flattening the leather, the wet skin is passed throughwill go through rollersa rolling machine to be prepared for the next soaking stage.
Before polishing the leather, it’s necessary to tan the leather by lying the leather in a special liquid of water and a kind of vegetable for a while. Polishing the leatherPolishing leather with specialised equipmentwith special tools under pressure is followed by transporting itis the final stage before moving it to a manufacturing factorythe manufacturing company.
Finally there, the leathers will be measured, cut, designed, and made into variable products, namely different shoes, purses, leather balls, etc.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response follows the process in a generally clear sequence and covers most major stages from drying through manufacture. Its main weakness is precision: it mislabels lime as lime juice, gives a misleading account of the factory transfers, and adds unsupported actions such as measuring and cutting, while several word-choice and grammar errors reduce control. Prioritise describing only the labelled stages and materials, using accurate passive process language.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
Most principal stages are described in sequence, but the overview is partly misleading and several materials or actions are inaccurate or unsupported.
Report the exact labelled stages, including washing in water and lime, soaking in lime, tanning, polishing, transport, and manufacture, without adding inferred actions.
Coherence and Cohesion
The chronological organisation and paragraphing make the process easy to follow, although some references and transitions are imprecise.
Use a consistently staged sequence with clear links such as subsequently, after this, and once the hide has been polished.
Lexical Resource
The response has adequate process vocabulary, but frequent imprecise choices such as staff, intake, lying, and variable products weaken accuracy.
Learn precise process terms and collocations, including hide, soak, tanning solution, polish, transport, and various products.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response attempts varied passive and complex forms, but errors in verb forms, articles, plurals, and sentence structure occur regularly.
Use controlled passive clauses for each stage and check forms such as is dried, is transported, is soaked, and is made into.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The diagram details the process of making leather products.
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