The table below gives information about student enrolments at Manchester University in 1937, 1967 and 2017.
Sample Response
This table depicts some information about student enrolmentsstudents registers at Manchester University in three different years ( 19371973, 1967, 2017 ). It’s clear from the table that the number of students enrolled in the university increased rapidlygrew up speedily.
According to what is shown in the table. The number of students enrolled was 327was 327 students in 1937, and it rose toincreased quickly to become 1133 students after 30 years and 6254 students in 2017. The percentage of female students wasThe percentage of female was 45%, that was 10 percentage points lower thanlower by 10% than the percentage of male in 1937, the percentage of female students decreasedthe percentage of female decreased by 10 % to become 35% in 1967, by contrast, the male percentage increasedthe percentage of male increased by 10 % to become nearly twice the female percentagenearly the double of female inat the same year, in 2017, the percentage of male fell by 20 percentage pointsdecreased by 20 % to become 45% while the percentage of female studentswhere the percentage of female increased by 20% to become 55%.
The percentage of students who came from within 40 miles of Manchester was 55% in 1937, and it fell by 40 percentage points to 15%went down by 30% to become 15% in 1967 and 1-2% in 2017. The percentage of students who came overseas was 6% from 4 countries in 1937, and itIt increased to 32% from 102 countries in 2017.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response identifies the strong growth in enrolment and reports most figures accurately, with reasonably clear grouping by topic. Its main limitation is incomplete and occasionally inaccurate coverage: the overview misses the changing student profile, the 1967 overseas figures are omitted, and the fall from 55% to 15% is misstated. Prioritise a fuller overview and careful checking of comparisons, then edit long sentences for grammatical control.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A basic overview and most key figures are included, but some visual information is omitted or inaccurately compared.
Summarise the main changes in gender and student origin, include the 1967 overseas figures, and correct the fall from 55% to 15%.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response uses sensible topic-based paragraphs, although a fragment and a very long run-on sentence disrupt progression.
Divide the gender comparison into shorter sentences and use full stops and linking phrases to mark each time period clearly.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary communicates the main trends, but several awkward collocations reduce precision and naturalness.
Use accurate phrases such as 'student enrolments', 'rose rapidly', and 'the percentage of female students'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Simple meanings remain clear, but frequent errors in sentence boundaries, articles, agreement, and prepositions limit control.
Prioritise complete sentences and check article, verb, and preposition choices before adding complex comparisons.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The table below gives information about student enrolments at Manchester University in 1937, 1967 and 2017.
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