The pie charts show the results of a survey conducted by a university on the opinions of full-time and part-time students about its services.
Sample Response
The pie charts compare the opinions of full-time and part-time students about twotheir university services, including IT support and opening hours.
Overall, it is clear that there was more positive feedback for opening hours than for IT supportwith regard to the opening hours than the IT support. Also, full-time students were more satisfied with both servicestended to be more satisfied with the two services than their part-time counterparts.
Regarding IT support, 54%over half of the surveyed full-time students said that they were very happy with this service, while only 20%a fifth of part-time students reported that they were very happy. In contrast, just 15% of the students studying full-time were not satisfied with IT support, in comparison with 45% of part-time students. The proportion of both types of students being quite happy with this service was similarrelatively the same, at 31% and 35%, respectivelyabout one third.
The majority of full-time and part-time students felt very happy with the current opening hours, at 87% and 72% respectively. Only 1% of the surveyedexamined full-time students were not satisfied with the opening hours, whereasopening hours whereas the figure for part-time students was a little higher, at 5%. The remaining 12% of the surveyed full-timefulltime students felt quite happy with this service, as opposed to nearly a quarter of part-time students.
Why this response received Band 8.0
The response gives a clear overview and selects accurate, well-compared figures for both services and student groups. Its organisation and language are consistently controlled, with only minor wording issues such as “examined full-time students” and an occasional form choice. To improve further, refine these small lexical and grammatical details while maintaining the same precise comparative coverage.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A clear overview identifies both principal patterns, and the supporting figures accurately cover every response category across both services and student groups.
Maintain this comprehensive selection while making the overview even more exact by noting that the satisfaction gap between groups is greatest for IT support.
Coherence and Cohesion
The four paragraphs are logically organised, comparisons progress naturally, and cohesive devices are used accurately without drawing attention to themselves.
For further refinement, vary the openings of detail sentences while preserving the clear service-by-service organisation.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is varied and precise for reporting proportions and comparisons, with only rare awkward wording such as “examined full-time students.”
Replace the few less natural choices with standard survey terms such as “surveyed respondents” or simply “full-time students.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A wide range of complex comparative structures is used accurately, and the few minor form issues do not impede communication.
Polish small details such as writing “full-time” consistently and using the plural “proportions” when referring to two groups.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The pie charts show the results of a survey conducted by a university on the opinions of full-time and part-time students about its services.
Your response
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