The Bar graph below shows the Expenditure in Million Pounds on fast food items by income groups in the UK.
Sample Response
The column graph compares how much money British citizens with different income levelseconomic status spent on three fast food items in 1990. Overall, high and average income class British spent morespent more amount on hamburgers and low-income class spent most onpreferred to eat fish & chips as their spending pattern suggests. As is presented in the diagram, high-income consumersrich people spent the highest amount on purchasing hamburgers, around 47 million poundsPounds, and their expenses for fish & chips and pizza were between 17 andto 19 million. Interestingly, Average-income class spent more money on fish & chips than rich customers did. They spent exactly 25 millionmillions on fish & chips though their highest amount went on hamburgers, roughly 33 million. Though high-income Britonsrich British spent more on pizza than that of fish and chipsfish & ships, average-income class in Britain did the opposite. Finally, low-income class people spent considerably lessa considerably fewer amount on fast food and their most preferred item was fish & chips for which they spent around 17 million poundsPound. Their spending on hamburgers was less than 15 million while they spent the least amount on pizza, which amounted to nearly 7 million Pounds.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response clearly identifies the dominant spending pattern across the income groups and supports it with mostly accurate figures in a logical sequence. Its main weakness is that some comparisons are wordy and several expressions or units are informal or imprecise. Prioritise concise grouping of the income categories and use neutral expenditure language with carefully stated values.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The report accurately identifies the main pattern: higher- and average-income groups spent most on hamburgers, while the low-income group spent most on fish and chips. Most figures are close, though some values are rounded and the unit is sometimes expressed awkwardly.
Keep the key values precise: high-income hamburger spending about 47 million pounds, average-income hamburgers about 33 million, and low-income pizza about 7 million.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response has a clear overview and proceeds by income group, which is logical. Some sentences are long and include repeated comparisons that could be grouped more tightly.
Use one paragraph for high and average income groups and one for the low-income group, with a short final comparison if needed.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is adequate for a bar chart, but expressions such as economic status, rich people, preferred to eat, and fish and ships are inaccurate or informal.
Use neutral data language: income groups, high-income consumers, expenditure, spending, and fish and chips.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Meaning is clear, but there are repeated article, plural, and comparison errors.
Check number phrases such as 25 million, between 17 and 19 million, and million pounds.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The Bar graph below shows the Expenditure in Million Pounds on fast food items by income groups in the UK.
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