The chart below shows the percentage of the population in the UK who consumed the recommended daily amount of fruit and vegetables in 2002, 2006 and 2010.
Sample Response
The chart illustrates the percentagespercentage of men, women and children who consumed the recommended amount of fruit and vegetables dailyon a daily basis in 2002, 2006 and 2010three different years.
Overall, women had the highest figurescame out first in termsterm of recommended fruit and vegetable intakefruit and vegetable consumption while children had the lowest figuresthe opposite was true for children.
In all three years, there was a narrow gapsmall difference in the percentage of men and womenmales and females who met the daily recommendation for fruit and vegetablesconsumed enough fruit and vegetables every day. Women's highest figureThe highest figure for women was 32% in 2006 compared with 28% for mencompared to 28% of men. 2010 witnessed the second highest rank for both women and men’s figures. While 27% of women consumed fruit and vegetables, the figure for men was 24%the percentage of men was 24%. And the smallest figure for both women and men, which was nearly the same as the 2010 figures, was recorded in 2002.
The smallest percentage of people consuming the daily recommended amount of fruit and vegetables was children with only 11% in 2002, half as much as that of men and women in the same year. By 2006Following that, the figure for children increased slightlyslightly increased to 16% in 2006 before falling marginally to 14% in the last year.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response presents the categories clearly and supports its comparisons with accurate figures, with the children's trend described particularly efficiently. Its main limitation is that the overview identifies only the highest and lowest groups and omits the shared rise to 2006 followed by a decline. Make that common time trend explicit, then refine a few awkward comparative and ranking expressions.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response accurately reports the main category differences and most figures, but the overview omits the common peak in 2006 and subsequent decline.
Add the shared time trend to the overview and include the exact 2002 figures for men and women to complete the key comparisons.
Coherence and Cohesion
Clear paragraphing separates the overview, adult figures, and children's figures, while progression remains easy to follow throughout.
Integrate the sentence beginning with “And” into the preceding comparison and use a more specific reference than “Following that.”
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary range is sufficient for describing proportions and changes, though several collocations such as “second highest rank” are awkward.
Replace ranking expressions with natural data-reporting phrases such as “the second-highest figures” and proofread fixed phrases such as “in terms of.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses varied sentence forms with generally good control, although errors in agreement, possessives, and comparative structures recur.
Review coordinated possessives and comparison patterns, especially phrases comparing the children's proportion with the separate figures for men and women.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The chart below shows the percentage of the population in the UK who consumed the recommended daily amount of fruit and vegetables in 2002, 2006 and 2010.
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