The pie charts show the main reasons for migration to and from the UK in 2014.
Sample Response
The first pie chart classifies the main reason for different nationalities to migrate to the UK while the second one shows the reasons for English to leave the country in 2014. Overall, study and job were two predominant reasons for people to migrate to and from the UK. As shownAs is stated, almost one-third of immigrants camethe people immigrated to the UK in 2014 for formalacademic study and that comprised the largest percentagehighest percentages of immigration to the UKof immigrants in the UK. 28% of immigrants28% foreigners came because they had a definite jobto work for a UK company while 14% came to look for workwere there to get a job. Interestingly, 10% of immigrantsone out of ten came to join friends or family members. 7% of immigrantsthem stated no apparent reason for their migration and the remaining 10% came for other reasonsreasons that are not listed in the diagram. On the other hand, the highest percentage of British migrated to other countries for their study and just over one-fourth were hired by foreign companies. It is worth noticing that the primary reasons for immigration and emigration to and from the UK have a similar pattern. 15% of Britons15% British moved to other countries to search for a job and 14% moved to accompany someone they knew. The remaining 17%Remaining 17% left the UK for unspecified reasons.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response gives a clear overview, selects nearly all major categories, and reports the percentages accurately, with a useful comparison between immigration and emigration patterns. The main limitation is imprecise reference to people and categories, including “English” for UK emigrants and the merging of two distinct categories into an unspecified 17%. Prioritise naming groups precisely and distinguishing “no reason stated” from “other.”
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response accurately reports the principal proportions and provides a clear overview, though the two smallest emigration categories are combined.
Report “no reason stated” and “other” separately and describe UK emigrants without assuming they are English.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response follows a clear chart-by-chart progression and uses cohesive devices effectively, despite limited paragraph separation.
Separate the overview and the two sets of details into distinct paragraphs for a more visibly controlled structure.
Lexical Resource
There is a good range of migration and comparison vocabulary, but several references and collocations are imprecise or awkward.
Use precise terms such as “immigrants,” “emigrants,” and “people from the UK,” while avoiding loose labels for national groups.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Varied sentence structures are generally clear, but missing articles and determiners and awkward noun phrases occur noticeably.
Check quantifier structures, especially forms such as “28% of foreigners” and “the remaining 17%.”
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The pie charts show the main reasons for migration to and from the UK in 2014.
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