The bar charts below provide information about honey production and honey-producing colonies in the five American states in 2006.
Sample Response
The twoyielded bar charts showdemonstrate the number of honey-producing colonies and the amount of honey producedthe number of honey-producing colonies and honey production in five American states:five American states, North Dakota, South Dakota, Montana, Minnesota, and Wisconsin, in 2006.
Overall, it can be clearly seen that North Dakota had the most honey-producing colonies whereas Wisconsin had the least additionally, for honey production, those had more colonies, those states had more production.
South Dakota had 220000 colonies for honey-producing colonies, which were second-highest among five states; this state’s number of honey-producing colonies was double that Montana had. Montana and Minnesota had similar numbersthe same number of colonies. In addition, with 350000 bee colonies, North Dakota was on top of the tables while Wisconsin had half the numbers as Minnesota.
For honey production, North Dakota'sDakota honey production was 26 million pounds, which26 million pounds which was far higher than that of the other statesfar higher than others. Honey production in South Dakota, Montana, and Minnesota was broadly similarwas roughly identical; Minnesota had about 1 million pounds less than South Dakota and roughly 0.5 million pounds less than Montanaonly 1 million pounds less than South Dakota and Montana. FinallyFurthermore, Wisconsin's production, the lowest figure,the lowest Wisconsin profit was aboutonly 6 million pounds.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response selects the principal features accurately, covers all five states, and supports its comparisons with relevant figures. The main weakness is uneven language control: awkward repetition, faulty comparison structures, and a run-on overview sometimes reduce clarity. The highest priority is to rewrite comparisons in concise, grammatical forms and to express the relationship between colony numbers and output more precisely.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The main patterns, extremes, and state comparisons are accurately reported with sufficient supporting data.
State the overall relationship more precisely, noting the common ranking across both charts rather than using a repetitive generalisation.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response follows a sensible overview-to-detail structure, but some long sentences and repetitive wording weaken flow.
Separate the overview into two controlled sentences and group each comparison without repeating honey-producing colonies unnecessarily.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is adequate for describing charts, but several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward.
Use precise terms such as honey output instead of profit and replace unnatural phrases such as yielded bar charts.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of sentence forms is attempted, but recurring article, comparison, and clause-joining errors are noticeable.
Practise accurate comparative patterns such as twice as many as and use full stops to prevent run-on sentences.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The bar charts below provide information about honey production and honey-producing colonies in the five American states in 2006.
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