The two pie charts below show changes in world population by region between 1910 and 2010.

Sample Response

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The pie charts compare the population distribution in different regions of the world in 1910 and 2010 and also depictdepicts the changes in global population in these territories. A glance at the diagrams reveals that more than half of the world populationcitizens resided in Asia, both in 1910 and 2010, and the share of the global populationthe ratio of the global population division decreased in Asia and Europe over the centuryin a century. According to the given illustration, in 1910, the global populationinhabitants was 1.7 billion which increased substantiallyoverwhelmingly increased and reached 6 billionreached to 6 billion in just 100 years. Six out of every ten persons, in 1910, lived in Asia, making it the region with exactly 60% of the global population60% global people. Then Europe and Russia comprised one-fourth of the global citizenry while 3% and 5% of the global community lived in Latin America and North America. Finally, the lowest population sharepercentage of the population allotment could be observed in Latin America and African region had one and a half percent more citizen share in this year. A century later, in 2010After a century, 2010, to be exact, the population diffusion in different parts of the world changedchanges. More than half of the world population waswere in Asia, though it is precisely six percentage points lowersix percent fewer than that of a century back. North America's percentages of the population remained unchanged but made it the continent with the lowest percentage of the world population which was previously held by Latin Americathe Latin America. Interestingly, population distribution in Europe and Russia dropped to almost half while it more than doubled in Latin America and Africa. Finally, six percent people lived in the Middle East and North Africa in 2010 though no data was given for this region explicitly in the first pie chart.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.5

The response identifies the dominant regions and describes most major shifts across the century, with useful figures supporting the comparison. Its main weakness is uneven precision: it overlooks the Others category and consequently misidentifies the smallest shares, while several numerical relationships are misstated. The highest-priority improvement is to verify every comparison against both charts and present the information in clearly separated overview and detail paragraphs.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TA

Task Achievement

7.0
Scoring rule

A clear overview and mostly accurate coverage of major changes are provided, but the smallest categories and one African comparison are inaccurately reported.

Next step

Check all categories before selecting extremes, noting that Others is 3% in both years and Africa exceeds Latin America by one percentage point in 1910.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

6.0
Scoring rule

The progression from an overview to 1910 and then 2010 is clear, although the entire response is presented as one long paragraph.

Next step

Separate the introduction, overview, and year-by-year details into focused paragraphs to make the comparison easier to follow.

LR

Lexical Resource

6.0
Scoring rule

The response uses varied population vocabulary, but frequent unnatural combinations such as global people, citizen share, and population diffusion reduce precision.

Next step

Prefer standard chart language such as proportion, share, population, increased, and decreased rather than forcing unfamiliar synonyms.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.0
Scoring rule

A mix of simple and complex structures communicates the data, but recurring agreement, article, preposition, and tense errors remain noticeable.

Next step

Proofread each sentence for subject-verb agreement and stable past tense, especially when describing the two historical years.

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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1

The two pie charts below show changes in world population by region between 1910 and 2010.

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