Your English-speaking friend who lives in your town has asked for your advice about learning a new sport. Write an email to you friend. In your email: Recommend a new sport that would be suitable for your friend to learn Explain how your friend could learn this sport Suggest that you learn this sport together.
Sample Response
Dear Ram,
I hope you are doing great. I am super excited to know that you want to learn a new sportnew learn sport. As IAs, I am have been playing cricket for many yearsplaying cricket for many years, I want to encourage you to be partbe the part of my team as well.
Firstly, there is a newthere is new cricket coaching centre opened in our town, with an experienced coachwith experienced coach. It will be easy for you to start your training as a beginner. Moreover, I also learned that the trainerthat trainer was part of national cricket team, and speaks several languagesspeak in plenty of language, so communication problem is also solved.
Furthermore, if we join the same classesif we will join same classes, then we will get time to practise together as well as we can stand by each other'sother side at difficult times. On top of thatOn the top of that, the fee isfees is only 200 rupees per month, including all geargears. So, there is no need to spend extra money on buying equipmentaccessories.
If you have any doubt about anything, please let me know, I will help you out. See you soon.
Sam
Why this response received Band 6.5
The letter successfully addresses all parts of the prompt with an appropriate informal tone and clear paragraphing. However, the overall impact is weakened by frequent grammatical slips and some awkward vocabulary choices. To improve, the writer should focus on refining conditional structures and ensuring correct article usage throughout the letter.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response fully addresses all three bullet points, recommending cricket, explaining how to learn it at a local centre, and suggesting joining together.
To improve, ensure that the details provided feel entirely natural and realistic for the situation described.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is logically organized with clear paragraphing, though some transition words are slightly too formal for a letter to a friend.
Practice using more natural, conversational linking phrases such as 'Also' or 'By the way' instead of formal essay markers like 'Furthermore'.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is generally adequate to convey the message, but there are several awkward collocations and word choices like 'all gears' and 'plenty of language'.
Focus on learning common sports-related collocations, such as 'sports gear' or 'equipment' and 'speaks several languages'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
While a mix of simple and complex sentences is attempted, grammatical errors in article usage, subject-verb agreement, and conditionals are frequent.
Review the rules for first conditional clauses, ensuring you use the present simple after 'if' (e.g., 'if we join' instead of 'if we will join').
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
Your English-speaking friend who lives in your town has asked for your advice about learning a new sport. Write an email to you friend. In your email: Recommend a new sport that would be suitable for your friend to learn Explain how your friend could learn this sport Suggest that you learn this sport together.
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