You have just moved into a new home and are planning to hold a party. You are worried that the noise may disturb your neighbour. Write a letter to your neighbour. In your letter: - introduce yourself - describe your plans for the party - invite your neighbour to come

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Sample Response

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Dear Mr and Mrs Simpson,Dear Mr and Mrs Simpson, I am your next-door neighbour and we have recently moved into this house. I regret that I did not get the opportunity to meet you properlybe acquainted with you. In fact, we are a family of three - me, my wife and our 8-year-old sonour 8 years old son. We are planning to hold a party next Monday and would like to invite you. My son’s birthday will be next Mondaywill be on next Monday. Hence, my wifespouse and I have decided to celebrate this special occasion and invite some friends and relatives. The party will startcommence at 7:00 pm and continue untiltill midnight. It will consist of some music and dancing in which a local music band will perform. Dinner will be servedThe dinner will be served at around 808:00 pm in the garden and the concert will be held afterwards. Although the the guest list is fairly smallparticipants are comparatively limited, we are afraid the noise from the musicthe noises from the music performance might disturb you. We apologize in advance for any inconvenience causedcreated by this. I initially intended to invite you and your family to the party over the phone, but I hesitated whether it could be a good idea or not. My wife suggested that it would be more appropriate if I wrotewrite a letter to do so. We will be genuinely pleased if you kindly accept our invitation to our son's birthday partybeloved son's birthday ceremony. This way, we will not only find the chance to get to know each otherbecome familiar but enjoy the occasion together. Best Regards, Ali Kazemian

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.5

The letter fully introduces the family, explains the birthday-party arrangements, acknowledges the possible disturbance and warmly includes the neighbours, so its purpose is consistently clear. However, the single-block presentation, unnecessary explanation about a phone invitation and several overly formal or awkward expressions reduce focus and naturalness. Prioritise clear paragraphing around the three communicative purposes, then simplify the invitation wording and proofread articles, word forms and conditional structures.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TA

Task Achievement

8.0
Scoring rule

The letter introduces the family, describes the party, warns about possible noise and invites the neighbours.

Next step

Keep the relevant content, then revise the wording and organisation points highlighted in the essay comments.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

7.5
Scoring rule

The order is logical, but the one-block format and phone-invitation detail weaken focus.

Next step

Use clearer paragraphing and smoother links so each bullet point is easy to follow.

LR

Lexical Resource

7.5
Scoring rule

Vocabulary is polite, though several phrases are too formal or unnatural for neighbours.

Next step

Prefer natural collocations and precise topic vocabulary over overformal or translated-sounding phrases.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0
Scoring rule

Grammar is generally clear, with article, word-form and conditional errors.

Next step

Proofread tense, articles, prepositions and sentence boundaries before submitting.

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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1

You have just moved into a new home and are planning to hold a party. You are worried that the noise may disturb your neighbour. Write a letter to your neighbour. In your letter:

- introduce yourself

- describe your plans for the party

- invite your neighbour to come

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